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Old 04-30-03, 03:54 PM   #1
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City of Cleveland

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Down in Cleveland we be cheifin,
we be chillin we be geekin,
every weekday every weekend,
don't have time to get no sleep in,
Refer it stays on my mind,
don't fuck wit it if it's not kind,
roll the best buds in my blunts,
while other shit gets left behind,
On the clock,
I feed the need to breath the weed,
On the block,
fiends exceed the deeds of greed,
In the city of Cleveland,
I push I slang,
It's a shame believin,
we shook we lame,
Nah sleep on us if you choose,
we creepin on a come up,
cuz if you creep you winnin,
if you sleepin you lose.

just reppin for c-town and for my niggas BTNH
WUDDUP N.B.S.L
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Old 04-30-03, 04:13 PM   #2
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yo dat shit was tight but u gotta put words in yo flow to put expression! Instead of making it sound like a poem!

nice drop nigga!
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Old 04-30-03, 04:14 PM   #3
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aight dog look you concentated on the flow and not enough on you punches and what not
1.lines to small make em longer
2.get a bigger vocabulary
3.good flow
4.aight wordplay
5.you need a constant rhymescheme abab or aabb
6.need multis
7.work on metas other than that it was aight hit me up if you dont know what any of that meanz aight holla
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Old 04-30-03, 08:29 PM   #4
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madd whackkkkkkkk
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Old 05-01-03, 07:37 AM   #5
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i second that (hey that rhymed) lol
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Old 05-01-03, 11:07 AM   #6
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haha it's all good i'm open to CONSTRUCTIVE critism
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Old 05-01-03, 03:18 PM   #7
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That joint waz hott. It was form the heart. Kepp it going nigga!
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Old 05-02-03, 09:46 AM   #8
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hey trill and bash get off his fucken nuts im serious
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Old 05-02-03, 03:05 PM   #9
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aight dog look you concentated on the flow and not enough on you punches and what not


^^ STFU U Dumb Ass.....U Don't Kick Punches In An Open Mic, U Save That For Battles....No Wonder U'r Flows Are So Butt.....Now, Let's Get Down To Business.....That Was Tight Rodney....Pretty Good Wordplay....Nice Rhyme Scheme.....I Was Feeling This.....Keep Postin' Em Fam........


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Old 05-02-03, 03:25 PM   #10
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i agree, i normally like a longer peice, but dis shit here was tight i liked it, and yo bash and trill dis here is wat da dudes 20th post lay off g's....
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