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Old 05-10-03, 03:53 PM   #1
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S.S-*throws the cop on the pillar*fuck u u killed my brother
Cop-sorry it was an accident
S.S-fuck that
Cop-what are u going to do to me?
S.S-............
yo i'm killin all those i spot in a vison never missin always hittin my targets wit precise precision//
dicin heads open and leavin them in divisions got my target mad cuz he was my mission//
tired of talkin i'm movin in for an attack he starts cryin sayin he has a family but that ain't holdin me back//
already had the D.E. in my hand ready to teach him how to act so I loaded it and shot him twice in the sack//
i stopped, put the gun my pocket got cocky and pulled his right arm out his socket//
then smacked him wit it knowing there was no way for him to stop it, looked down and spotted a rocket//
picked it up but put it back down cuz i wanted to have more fun, so I opened his chest and pulled out a lung//
pulled it out and said why stop at one so i puled out the other and had him sayin was i done//
I took the gun out and he closed his eyes and whispered "finnaly my demise"........*a D.E. fires*

plow my body falls to the floor and I looked back and it was his daughter...fuck that whore......
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Old 05-10-03, 03:54 PM   #2
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Old 05-10-03, 03:54 PM   #3
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Should have been longer , , lacked wordplay , vocab , , but i guess it didnt need vocab cause it was about ur life ,,,,,,,,,,,, i Liked it cuzzn , you did good for ur first drop...
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Old 05-10-03, 04:01 PM   #4
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it wasn't really supposed to have wordplay or vocab because its thru the eyes of gangsta...what gangsta u know thinks wordplay? its supposed to be exactly like he thinks and does. vocab and wordplay is for battles
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Old 05-10-03, 04:04 PM   #5
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Bitch u dumb , ,, vocab and wordplay aint only juss for battles ,, its for battles and open mics ,,,, u fuckin dumbass , and did u read my reply , , i said this drop didnt need vocab because its about ur life , , , and that statement u made was really dumb , , , ,"Vocab and wordplay is for battles" ........................LOL
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Old 05-12-03, 11:54 AM   #6
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yo bash kid my fault i be trippin sometimes.
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Old 05-12-03, 12:20 PM   #7
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well i think it was aight even though i think it would have been better wit some vocab and wordplay but thats just my opinion............aight one holla back
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Old 05-12-03, 12:34 PM   #8
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"it wasn't really supposed to have wordplay or vocab because its thru the eyes of gangsta...what gangsta u know thinks wordplay? its supposed to be exactly like he thinks and does. vocab and wordplay is for battles"

Urgh... Pentiums are gangsta. Where's ya dawgs at? People in gangs are slow-witted and COOL, dawg. Does your mother drive a Volvo, or Saab? Vocab and wordplay is for battles... Keep believing that while dropping pseudo-gangster corny crap. Spotted a rocket? You son of a bitch, you owe me 3 minutes of my life back. MUCH LOVE YO, KEEP DROPPN DEM HOTNES BRO, WORD, NO DOUBT, PEEP MY SHIT. ugh.
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Old 05-12-03, 11:27 PM   #9
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ight thanx for some honest feedback keep them coming cuz i'm thinkin bout droppn another one and i want it to be perfect..
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Old 05-16-03, 02:51 PM   #10
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wtf yo not knockin what ya'll say but son if what u write sounds good to you fuck that then it is wtf is evey one's problem always tryin to please other people what is perfect?!?!?!? wtf is perfection? none of us truly know because it is how you see it.. i mean don't get me wrong what you wrote could have been better but it is opinion. feel me just keep doin you!
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