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Dream Girl
IP: FA18 DB59
Everyday at noon my lady goes out to lunch
One day she will be mine, don't ask, I just have a hunch I sit in my window like a doggie and drool The weathers gotten warmer and her outfits so cruel She has legs like a fountain that flow down from her skirt I'd undo with my teeth every button on her silky white shirt Her hair flows long and brown with the slightest little curl I'd walk up to her and talk but on her shoes I would hurl Her mouth open an inch her eyes squint in light of the sun If she were mine I'd open those eyes and show her some fun Wind pressed her shirt tight up against her breast It would only cheapen her existance if I told you the rest Sure enough though, here comes her man, a bum fo shizzy The way he looks at her, its empty, when I see her I get dizzy Forehead hits the window as I get stuck in a daze She disappears around the corner in the lovely sun rays Until tomorrow my queen, when you go out for lunch I'll be here, watching you, and then sigh, shoulders hunch One of these days I will walk out there, before her man shows I will ask her if she realizes that her smile so radiantly glows Then before her guy can get there to intercept my display I will say things that leave her speechless, with nothing to say Then I will ask her, is it you that only he can adore? Because if I were hers and she were mine our spirits would soar... |
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BANNED for biting
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IP: FF98 53B8
You're gettin better dawg
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IP: 6B6C 6E9F
i really liked that keep doin your thang boy
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-Real Time-
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IP: FDD6 AE15
nice shit , just work the flows more dawg... you need longer flows and better rhymes ... but good for a beginner
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IP: FA18 DB59
More thoughts? advice?
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IP: 7FF3 F1B4
dat was tight!
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IP: A2C2 E6C9
Couple humorous lines here and there...didn't know if you wanted it to be portrayed that way..
Her hair flows long and brown with the slightest little curl I'd walk up to her and talk but on her shoes I would hurl ...Stan from South park? lol Good spit. |
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