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Old 05-23-03, 11:16 PM   #1
Van Ished
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Hey Boo

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..........

I hate to see you sad, I'm happy when you smile...
I hug you for only moments, but it seems to last a while...
I like to hear your voice, so sometimes I don't speak...
I feel comfort when your around and kiss me on my cheek...

I'm sorry I get on your nerves, my actions are unintentional...
I'm sorry if some of the things I do seem a bit criminal...
I'm sorry I don't get angry and let you have your way...
I'm sorry that I can't be there with you each and every day...

We just saw each other a minute ago and already I miss you...
We just let go of each other but I still wanna kiss you...

When I run outta things to say that you can relate to...
just know that my silence means I'm saying Hey Boo....
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Old 05-24-03, 09:10 AM   #2
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i like it..is good!
UpPiN!
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Old 05-24-03, 12:58 PM   #3
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I love you too baby!
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Old 05-24-03, 01:14 PM   #4
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This was good. I liked how it read real easy but had feeling to it. Stuff like that is hard to do.

"I hate to see you sad, I'm happy when you smile...
I hug you for only moments, but it seems to last a while...
I like to hear your voice, so sometimes I don't speak...
I feel comfort when your around and kiss me on my cheek..."

I liked that part. It's usually backwards for me with the hugs line, though They seem like seconds when they're minutes.

The ending of it was good. Yeah, I liked this piece from you. Keep posting
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Old 05-24-03, 04:32 PM   #5
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nice work. feelin that. its simple to follow and it has simple vocab but it has a nice feelin to it. dang i remember when i used to right stuff like this lol..ahhh baq in tha day. neways feelin that mos def. great peice
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Old 05-24-03, 11:19 PM   #6
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Thanx ya'll
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