now that i got y'alls attention

my vocal chords exhale lines sharp as swords/
without a pause i be the cause for overcrowdin in morgues/
vastly underrated, but then i lyrically developed and peaked/
bars and flows unique, wen u see me theres 'no doubt' u 'dont speak'/
my verbs enter ur cerebellum, then proceed to infect like a virus/
causing rigamortis which in 10 seconds'll leave ur body lifeless/
my style often immitated, my dick y'all better get off it/
i'm the only reason wheelchair firms keep makin a profit/
all i need is one mic, one stage and one turn/
to make a massacre, my words cause third degree burns/
i cud commit a 187 seven with a witty one liner/
up in ya girlz vagina, its the ill rhyma - 2 tyma/



ayo contructive criticism only cos y'all lo 2 hate

this aint how i usually rhyme so respect me 4 tryin sumn diffrent

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2 Tyma AKA Boy wonder

This was Whack...........Too Simple

that aint really constructive....plus i be feelin like u 'bashin' me jus cos i'm familia i need sum unbiashed opinion

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2 Tyma AKA Boy wonder

very simple shit here....

too many played lines...

try thinking outside the box and concentrate on worplay man

\anyhow peep my open mic "The Life I Lead"

yer i guess i cud do dat. thanx i'll go peep yo shit naw............................................... .................................................. ............................

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2 Tyma AKA Boy wonder

yo, it was a'ight.. 1 second.. FUCK B.R.E.......

okay.. you did have some played lines, I liked the wheelchair firm part tho, work on similes and wordplay.. shit that makes you think and still rhymes.. I usually go for the funny side of shit, but find your own style, your flow was good.. all I really got to say is keep elevatin.. REP TO THA FULLEST

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thx dogg i think i jus need sum advice if i'm finna elevate this shit. la famila 4 reel now.

FUK B.R.E

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