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.........shit.................excellent........... .....u did ya thing boy......fo' sho............much love............
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you mean boys.. its a collab dipshit.. but thanks anyway..
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^ How come our thread attracted all the half assed replys and idiots?! lol. .
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tht shit was tight, i agree with whoever said it reminded them of tupacs case of the stolen mic
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^ I read yours, it was love type open mic, the topics been done many a time before, your verse had nothing stand out, multi's were there but in the very basic stages, not very imageric or emotional, seemed syrung together in a keystyle if you ask me, it was long as fuck too.
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uppppppin.
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common people..
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uppin one last time.. lets get some dope responses.
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remake of the original post.....
ok,nice verse from both yall...nice work,your styles seem to go together very well...much similarity... the vocab wasnt to harsh,or overworked,it seemd you got your points across easikly witht he more simplistic rhyme type... i liked how the lines were hsort and ending with a long line,just seemed that way to me,but i liked it...nice use of a rhyme scheme. the suicide part was excellent,even i fyo udie...you still end up on writers block,nicely thought out.liked it alot. liked how you made writers block seem like an actualy place you get stuck in,sounds depressing like that,an i guess i can understand how annoying and depressing it gets when you get writers block,not being able to think straight to write...pisses me off...especially when you wan tto...and the idea of it being like a cell almost was perfect,nice job... pen bleeds dry...nice line...cant write an your dyin from it...bleedingdry....thats what i picke dup anyway... im th efirst child to die on writers block...that was ill...excellent lil song from yall...most these cats havent read it...wouldnt understand if they did im guessing...but liked how you made a topic like getting writers block,deep and personal....very real. excellent verse,having read it a coule of times,i think i understand th econcept somewhat,i hope im right,very nicely done... |
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^ Quite correct actually, Tik came up with the topic and asked me how i was thinking on taking the topic, straight away i said as more of an actual place, an actual 'street' from there we played around with the subject, threw in wordplay such as The Jump Off, which was actually suicide, you were correct again! That was my take on it, that even after death your on writers block, thanks for taking the time to read it and try understanding what it was about,, its appreciated!
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wishing someone would give me directions
on how to escape from Writers Block is that where prantik's verse ends,,,,,,,,,,, yot his was ill, the vocab was sick........the flow was good........ the topic was dope........its flawless........................ nice job......................... |
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^ There's a thread posted by Atetrack Defined for it to get into RB Legends, if you wouldnt mind - post in there saying it should be, thats the only way people will recognise it. .
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Im sittin with pen brandished,
tryna release some written anguish But it seems my pens bled dry, and each of my thoughts have vanished Its the worst feeling, i cant jot what i wnt to say down so im forced to take out my mood Swings at the local Playground searching for inspiration, tryna think outside the box wishing someone would give me directions on how to escape from Writers Block Mind tied in knots, but the lines wont combine or connect i cant express how im feeling, remain trapped in a Vortex staring at a blank page, not knowing where to start from considering climbing a building, and waiting for The Jump Off ^ It was me up to there Trill. . |
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you got that feeling down properly there man. lots of people have tried this concept before but yours really captures the frustration of tryin to write a verse when ya mind just wont work. techically this piece is aight it coulda had some better vocab and a more clearly defined rhyme structure but it was still tight. anyway cuz return the favour and check mine Shinobi Musings
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