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Old 05-29-03, 04:25 PM   #1
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Da Monster is Back

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Secretly in the heart and the soul of the man/
There is a monster there dat can destroy the living/
The breathing is at risk this is dangerous/
He lives to cause pain on the flesh/
Killing the weak and saving the best/
I admit this monster in me can convey pain and suffering for many/
Man cant stop me bullets dont make wounds/
The monster affects me physically and mentally /
I defeat by using force and brutality/
The monster is a reeper in actuality/
My eyes see the enemy so I attack at will/
My mission is to destroy leaving the beast on Earth/
Those who cant survive I put'em in the dirt/
Destruction of the earth is imminent/
The earths survival I am souly dependent/
You can see the pain and killer instinct in my face/
Before you go to bed you betta say ya grace/
Cause who knows when it is your turn/
End up in eternal damnation forever ya burn/
Im so tenacious I live with no compliaction yo life is tainted/
Close ya eyes the picture is being painted/
My eyes turn red/
My physical features change/
Its all in the genes I am not to blame/
Secretly in the heart and the soul of a man/
There is a monster/
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Old 05-29-03, 10:59 PM   #2
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was ight not bad at all,, need to elivate some mo but tight
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Old 05-29-03, 11:26 PM   #3
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sounds like a poem try to structure your bars a lil better
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Old 05-29-03, 11:57 PM   #4
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this was ok, you had a nice idea but it didnt flow that great, elevate your flow and you will be alot better

check out my newest open mic "the storm" if you dont i wont reply to you open mics anymore
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