it's only the first 2 verses and a hook, still working on it, but holla with some feedback..

wraped in plastic, frantic, on ya last breath, start to panic.//
a manic depressive's life, hard ta grasp it.//
imagine you had it, your only way out's as an addict.//
doin' lines of coke, ecstacy--> and hits of acid.//
try'n ta create a smoke screen in a sense-->
to opress these feelings you have.//
feeling so bad, fault placed on yo-mom and dad.//
friends who werent there, and the family that doesn't care.//
so despared, sit with a blank stare, it ain't fair.//
life ain't fair, all this stryfe ain't fair.//
your pleight drives you to the knife blade there.//
why wait there?...

what is suicide, but a human mind
unstable and un-able to see the true you inside
lucks fabled it's just labled so you don't choose to die
consumes your heind sight, livin' a blind life
I'm right...irate, dry-mind state, try-fate...

hallucinations caused by loosin' patience.//
and a lack of sleep, like "imovane" with no booze to take it.// {imovane's a STRONG sleeping pill}
a slow pain seems to chew your brain stem.//
hate tempts, deep breaths ain't helpin' like drownin',
can't escape them, the voices, in your head pounding.//
louder and louder until you can't count them.//
can't help it, so you help them, 'cause more carnage than helter skelter.//
realize your actions and melt then, you feel like nothing.//
no hope or shelter, broken outer, inside you're explodin'
no control or help-near, you've chosen.. you're goin' without care...

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uppin' fuckers

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i like this i thought it was great to reAD....hey read the verse now with the fix ups see if you like
understand i dont seperate adlibs from lyrics so i see what you mean my bust heyy i like this we have to drop a peace togeather

That was the illest rhyme guy. Liked the content and the flow.
Each of your rhymes seems to get better and better.
Keep it up Bro.

that was pretty hot kid. mos def above average. get at me for a collabo.

damn.. every mo-fo wants a collab.. lol.. thx for the feedback

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I find it funny how after I prooved my point and merked bash in the battle, all the B.R.E. members and supporters stopped hating and started to show-love in a sense.. lol.. just a little somethin' 4-y'all to think about.. watch for a collab with me and BASH comin' sometime soon, it'll pro'lly be damn smokin'... holla

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uppin...

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i didn't even know there was a battle. and i pm'ed you and said i wasn't gettin involved, until at one point my name got mentioned in the disses. i didn't want beef but hell, it happend

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Only God can judge me, Who THE FUCK IS YOU?!