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Old 05-31-03, 05:44 AM   #1
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the unseen

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ay yo i need some feedback it's been about 2 months since i wrote somethin and if you thought i left guess again cus you can't get rid of me cus i'll keep elevatin.



a'ight i'm that nigga that can't be touched or be seen/
cus i'm invisible you'll only hear voices that aren't clean/
you might see me once in awhile but i won't have a reflection/
shit i'm a one man army i don't need protection/
so you know i can't be harmed or disarmed/
when you hear from me better sound the alarm/
nigga don't try me cus i'll just retaliate/
on ya bitch ass cus there is certian shit i won't tolerate/
when i'm done with you my lyrical ifection will manifest ya brain/
if you start to feel pain you know it's me so don't complain/
cus you know i'm not plain i'm the illest nigga out to entertain/
my strength is not normal shit this i can't even explain/
i have witnesses to tell you how dangerous i can be when i'm full of hate/
and they know i will hurt somebody and not even hesitate/
hell you can't even see me so you won't know my personal traits/
cus i'm the unseen whenever i do somethin it's a conspiracy/
cus you won't know who did it cus it's a mystery/
if you know i did it don't tell cus i'll make ya life a livin hell then take you out ya misery/


plz give me some feedback cus i'm a bit rusty.
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Old 06-01-03, 12:36 AM   #2
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i need some feedback or advice i would really appriciate it
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Old 06-01-03, 04:27 AM   #3
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c'mon dawgs i need some feedback or advise

i'll return the favor
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Old 06-01-03, 05:56 AM   #4
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want honesty. needs work,alot of it. pick a topic and spit on it. dont just bring a bunch of nonsense.


Dont be a herb, Return the fav.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=52579
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Old 06-01-03, 03:02 PM   #5
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This drop was Aight.........but Needs alot of work as B NEWS said
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Old 06-01-03, 03:36 PM   #6
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not bad, for coming back after 2 months! make it more complex, but i though it was aight!
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