ok r u ready, ready ready to hold it steady
speakin of hold it steady you can hold my nuts steady
so i can stick my dick in u like it was a machette
if ur a gurl, if ur a gurl then ur my world
and i will kill any one even you your or him
and it doesnt matter because im one of them
im also HIM and your futures grim
quick somebody get me a snapple
i got an asthma capsule stuck in my adams apple
ill kick you in the tummy till your sick to your stomach
and you vomit so much blood that your clothes stick to you from it
hit you in the head with a brick till you plummit
if you dont like me you can suck my dick till you num it
and all that jibburish that you spittin you need to kill it
cuz your style is like dyin in my sleep...i dont feel it!

Your flow and punchlines were alright but I couldn't really feel what it was about. You need more of a focused plot and a bigger vocab. Keep it up though you do got skills