Roses are red
Violets are blue
This is the beginning of most love poems
But my love is no ordinary love
It is much more deeper,sweeter ,and more real
She will never let me down
Never cheat
Never do me wrong
The way I stroke her
The way I feel when she is in my arms
I feel like the luckiest boy in the world
Notice I said boy
Haters doubt our love
They say I don't know what to do with her
I'm too young or I'm just foolish
I ignore all of the petty comments and remarks
She cannot function with out me and I cannot function with out her
Who is my greatest love?.......My pen
I love to write,draw,do anything that involes ink ,graphite,or even chalk
We are soulmates and will never part from each other.

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love poem....

hmm..im thinking this is too simple...no hates but this is not what i expected....but ull get there...keep droppin

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im not really a poet. so i just wanted to be well rounded...rap...poetry...singing...yes i can sing very well.

the poem was very different
but i didn't like it really

I think that you could have done more with this piece, even rearranging the words and breaks might have helped.. it seems like it was kinda rushed. Keep writing, you will find you flow.

It could have been more heartfelt, it didn't get where it was goin'

Not as poetic as it could've been either, but it was a generally good try...

agreed