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06-23-03, 01:08 PM
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Banned
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Too much Pain
IP: 2AF2 3A0F
years after years i lost to the struggle
troubled fears got me in tears, like no one loves you trained to aim at the sky, never to kill drinkin 40's to pass time, smokin blunts just to chill my enemys are my closests friends, until the end family and drugs got me fucked up, enuff said this time im ready to die, please god take me up delusions spark a fuse, releasin rage, fuckin me up insane to the holy, but i still starve for my reign to be leader for my niggas who dont have any game to show them how to play a bitch, for head make a page of a song, but my lifes the livin dead i'll never be ahead, probaly dead before i reach eigthteen...... theres to much pain. |
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06-23-03, 01:58 PM
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Venom Personified
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IP: 89E1 89D7
Looks kinda biten from tha Ja Rule version on his pain is love album
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06-23-03, 03:14 PM
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IP: CB4A 9405
^^word^^
flowed pretty well, but I got the impression of Ja Rule when I read it! |
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06-23-03, 09:45 PM
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IP: 2AF2 3A0F
yea its goes to the beat so much pain, just kinda reworded it
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06-28-03, 12:03 AM
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IP: 02C8 299A
i wasnt really feelin this...complex ur style, too simplistic....that was more like a poem.....
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09-13-03, 08:12 PM
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Banned
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IP: 2AF2 3A0F
man your a fuckin idiot, most songs come from poems
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09-13-03, 08:23 PM
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Banned for being stupid
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IP: 95C5 EAD6
yea i agree wit everyone else when i read it i was thinkin ja rule, but for what u had i thought the vocab was ok, the content was good, and overall it was aight. keep elevatin and postin dude.
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09-13-03, 08:24 PM
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IP: 95FF 1D86
good flow and rhythm, was an aite drop.
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09-13-03, 08:26 PM
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IP: 59C2 5C56
wow u need to learn to endure proper critisism......ur the fuckin idiot......wtf was that bullshit u wrote up there????.....ja rule????.......wtf r u thinkin?......hes the whackest nigga out there........anywayz......most songz dont come from poems.....get it straight......u need to take bad critisism.......dont expect all good....damn......i havent been on this site ina while and now i kno y.....cuz of whack niggaz like u.........u really need MULITS, VOCAB, and all the other criteria's to build a proper flow........so dun....ur ass needz to elevate..........and yes ur the fuckin idiot........lmao @ u.........i kno i'll rip u............im out......elevate bitch.......
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