This is a freestyle poem, my feelings are totaly messed up, this is exactly how i feel!!!


I'm dying slowly trying to remember the times we once had ...
Trying to figure out for myself how the fuck it got so bad ...
I love you to death you need to see that before I snap and die ...
I cant understand why! my life is one big lie, now all i do is cry ...
You can't leave me this way, dont leave me and say goodbye ...

I cant look in the mirror because i hate the man who looks back ...
He looks so sad and lonly please why wont you take me back ...
I'm ashamed of the person I've always hidin from, the other me ...
Now that your gone i'm afraid to see what the other me will do to me ...
I've got nothing left in life now I aint got you please try and see ...
That my love for will always be, and I'll never stop till God comes for me ...

I'm on the edge, on the brink of Suicide, this is something i cant hide ...
The amount of tears i've cried, the amount of times i've tried ...
The amount of fears i hide, they burn me up and it hurts deep inside ...
You said you need time and you have asked me to wait for you ...
I really want to wait but i cant without you, i cant pull through ...
I'm scared of what i'll do, i've got a gun in my hand what will i do? ...
Jacqui i love you, i need you to love me too please say you do ...

I've given up everything to keep us together, remember that ring ...
That was a something that meant more to me than anything ...
I never ever realised and never knew pain is what love would bring ...

Remember Our Times

Remember the way we kiss? All i can i do now is Reminisce ...
Remember the way we touch? I cant take this its all too much ...
Remember the way we talk? I even love the way you walk ...
Remember the way we slept? You held me in your arms i felt so kept ...
Remember the way we Hug? I do! but my grave is already dug ...
Remember the way we Laugh? like the time you asked me to get in your bath ...
Remember the way I cry? But thats gonna stop, not long till i die ...
Remember all of this? i cant believe you think it's all bullshit ...
Do You Remember me? I've forgoten who is i'm meant to be ...
Do You Remember US? I will never forget you my love ...

I'm sorry babe i cant go on anymore feeling like this ...
I'd just like to say " AINT LIFE A BITCH " !!!!!!

**Cocks Back and Pulls the Trigger**

A Liverpudlian, eh? Well let me tell you, even if i did have a car, you wouldn't dare nick it. I'd spray it with turd liquid of sorts. Alreet?!

Only kidding.

Onto the piece. The first part (up until 'remember our times') it was very pure in emotions. You just let rip your feelings and emotions onto paper (deja-vu?! Yes, cos many people do this..and it's good they do..).

Really though, it seemed very honest and to the point.

Then i felt the next part where you did the question-answer thing was good. Maybe over did it a bit. But nonetheless, from the heart.

The ending (last two lines) kind of blunted the piece. But then, that could also have been what you were feeling like. You know, had enough, end it all. Though could've done it in a better way, because this piece was one of those straight form the heart, i wouldn't put too much emphasis on it...

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lol funny

That was done freestyle... damn, This is the kinda poem I like to read best, internal rhyme, full of emotion, imagrey like hell, wow, Question-answere stanza's are cool but some people can't do em right, you pulled it off perfect,
peace

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That was done freestyle... damn, This is the kinda poem I like to read best, internal rhyme, full of emotion, imagrey like hell, wow, Question-answere stanza's are cool but some people can't do em right, you pulled it off perfect,
peace

phoenix i agree ya


hell of a nice drop ther Mc-Sniper keep elevating


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