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Old 07-02-03, 01:14 AM   #1
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If I have a problem will i find a solution?
If I have a friend will i always be lonely?
If I have a life to live, would i want to die?
If I have a Talent will i be willing to fly?
If I have a love in my life who is willing to care for me?
If I have a problem will you care for me?

Love, I always love you in all that you do
You know I want you and I care for you
You..my reason for living and to take this pain
You..are the reason that I make a happier gain

If I were to die tonight will you still love me tomorrow?
If I were to catch you cheatin, will you still give me your sorrow?
If I were to quit rappin and pursuit a career
Would you help me through the loss of all of these years?
If I considered rap like chasin a faraway dream
Would you still be supporting me, we are an unstoppable team

Love, and if I never found you i would never be happy
I would never have mtivation for poetry or rapping
You..my reason for living and to take this pain
You..are the reason that I make a happier gain

I love you even through when we have a fight
The stars and the moon ain't only whats up for tonight
Would you like me to be romantic,always this way
because you are my sunshine through the darkness of day
Love, i'd only want to dedicate this to you
Because the tings I feel, takes away all the cruel
You are the only thing that matters in life
I'd want you to be more than my wife
I love you, you don't kow how this feels
when a man could be with his girl, and stay real
You changed my life in a whole different way
You are why i keep lvin today

Love, I always love you in all that you do
You know I want you and I care for you
You..my reason for living and to take this pain
You..are the reason that I make a happier gain

Love, and if I never found you i would never be happy
I would never have mtivation for poetry or rapping
You..my reason for living and to take this pain
You..are the reason that I make a happier gain
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Old 07-02-03, 10:15 AM   #2
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uppin the piece
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Old 07-02-03, 06:16 PM   #3
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by chance were you listenin to 21 questions haha thats what i was thinkin about when i was readin it but its a nice piece, here my fav line

If I were to die tonight will you still love me tomorrow?
If I were to catch you cheatin, will you still give me your sorrow?
If I were to quit rappin and pursuit a career
Would you help me through the loss of all of these years?


this was way cute, i hope ur girl feels the same nice work
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Old 07-02-03, 07:40 PM   #4
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good piece, the questions were a good choice, keep it up
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Old 07-04-03, 01:13 PM   #5
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Yeah, you used the question 'thing' well in this piece..

...showing a good and pure use of simplicity. You got into it and dragged me into in the process. Most definetly felt it...

..nothing else to say..

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Old 07-04-03, 03:44 PM   #6
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*sigh* of course the very popular "IF's" of life..it really amazing how we assume things and just predict whats gonna happen if we are this or that ...or we did this or some shit...the questions and the answers...still is a mystery to me


oh and yeah bout the piece...

>lots of emotions and im really feeling this....the fact that you used to IF thing repetition...the piece stood put really astoundingly even without them..but like u structured that to look artistically good...the "ifs" helped out a lot

>not too much "interesting" vocabs in it but cuz u used simple words was quite amazing...

i liked this...hope u drop more!
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Old 07-04-03, 09:22 PM   #7
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thank you guys, still uppin this
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