What should I name this freestyle? Uppin for more feedback and comments.

Aiyyo
I'm back in this whole rap shit
just to see you get your fuckin ass kicked
cuz your rhymes are so full of wack shit
If I ever saw you again I'd probably hit you with plastic
load up a gun that says "Blast this!"
and duct tape ya neck wit a message that says "Snap this!"
I smack bitches around till they turn upside down
throw 'em in a garbage truck till someone claims 'em in the "Lost and Found"
and chew up and spit bullets to fill up they asses with holes for fuckin around
I spit lyrics at cats to make these nitwits flip quick
by kickin up this shit, cuz ya hit trick don't do shit
Fuck this, beef with me if you wish motherfucker
but you better think twice 'fore you battle me, cocksucker

here's a suggestion.... "They Call Me Wack Because..."

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Shiznit's Thoughts:

Vocabulary...errrr.not at all good....i mean you used like words that have been used before and its like some plain diss over nothing....well u couldve at least put in a couple of unique and interesting vocabs regarding on how simple it is...but yeh u could work on it

Flow...it wasnt that great either...its pretty damn short and it needs work....

Content....definitely not gonna work...although this is an interesting freestyle...its sounds pretty boring...and if u gonna use this in a battle..the punches are way way below average...u would be KOED in just a snap and u aint really wanna do that...u just gotta have to think of an interesting topic other than wack shit...

OVERALL....it needs work and i know u couldve executed it more better...but hey...we were newbies before too...we started wack too then work on some weak parts then elevate and still elevatin...

p.s
and for the title of ur freestyle...u can say "I need help" hehe

I SAID.

WE elevatin...u should join us!

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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>

^^lol^^,

Seriously, Why Did You Post It!

Haha. oh ok thanks for the feedback shiznit. alright I gotta go. later ya'll. Vote for me in the "Front Lines" k? thanx

oh yea............... this is a freestyle!

hmmm...seriously guys...these one line replies aint gonna go nowhere...i mean we gotta help each other so if guys just try..i mean even a little...i would appreciate it...so this is a warning for awhile....

Think about it.

ThankS

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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>

ok kiddo.............I'm old school..... I've been here before alot of these catz.........to me this is just to simple, but after all u said it was a freestyle....just try to work on being more unique. say things people don't always hear, and u will be ok.