the industry must be gay...90 percent of you cant say
~a straight line-your shit SUCK dont spit hymns-
must of given BRAINS TO MANY TIMES-
cause you lyrics sound like you got NUTTIN on your MIND-
im the type-to type- a verse a day-
you take a week to write 7 times as bleak-
as half the shit you diss being played-
aint what you potray-or what you display-
you an actor-
thinking you drop math ,you and mics are barely a fraction of a factor-
tellin me to watch what my words,DAWG I aint trying to knock ya-if you really a DRAMA KING must be working on the set of a SOAP OPERA-
this isn't directed to anyone except those who take it offensively-a loss comes extencively-
i prostitute my raps cause it will cost you to try and fuck with me-
got togeather with B.R.E-
1 for 2 in hot tracks with these m.c.'s-
after this one id burn 2 out of 3-
with a fire hydrents placed next to any store that sells my cd-
for safety-
the parentol advisory-would read.... not to be sold to anyone under 33-
GET IT?!-
with complimentary- condomns cause my style ill.... and you dont want to get infected-
contageous-gangreous-yet serpervious-with linguistic masikist-
cant rip- but your christmas list-wish-
to be able to spit a punchline with one 0f my fist or wrist-
when i delliver the gift-
see i dedicated myself, spirit,-and soul-
to lyric-with but one only goal-
clone- no one and be true to each individual chromosone-
to slap you bitches till you HORE~MOAN-(HORMONE)
give VA it's dignitey back-
rep NEW YORK and my LATING KING CROWN by stripping the wack-
let them REFLECT on they crimes and force they mirror to crack-
when they realize the difference between us is they live off tracks-i live for rap-
like my heart was a TRIATON rigged to a heart monitor remixing to my lungs sacks- made of adaps-
so i dont give a fuck if you think i aint got the talent-
if you think mentally im unbalanced-
this battle shit is like playing nintendo after xbox nothing is even a challenge-
run this let you live a lil waith a lil scratch on dj mats just so you can manage-
anything i touch i damage-
with lyrical compleity,brain density- that make woman sexually stimulated fanatsizing of my intensity-
do know how many careers jailed-cause of recyled acapells-
the seperation ~and~ ihabitation of your 7 percent~ thought construct~ of lame brain cells- just try and see the GOD i will show you hell-and how BABEL truly fell-

SICK............shit man.........am feelin the contend everythang dawg SICK


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uppin

this was ill.....content was there....good lines....flowed right....you had vocab...i'm feelin it

I couldn't catch the flow... but it was up to par compared to your other spits... seems rushed tho.. still good, but not your best... 1

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^^^^ agreed we seen better, but was still a tight piece, but you set a president man lol respect

i thought it was dope.....what yahad to say made allot of sense....but man....was it long.....worth the read tho....i idont think iv read ya last drops......but ill have to look out.....peace

chek my shit yall.... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=63886

uppin thanks and i noticed my verses been lacking lately but i need help figuring where the errors are i think my punches are tthe same as ever maybe my structure aint there help out and offer duggestions thanx to every one who critiqued

yo, it's how you started wording your lines, they don't flow as well as they used to, well maybe that, or your bar length is too stagered, 'cause it was all the flow fuckin' this one up.. like you have some real short bars and some real long ones throughout..

"this isn't directed to anyone except those who take it offensively-a loss comes extencively-
i prostitute my raps cause it will cost you to try and fuck with me-
got togeather with B.R.E-".... <-- see what I mean

"aint what you potray-or what you display-
you an actor-
thinking you drop math ,you and mics are barely a fraction of a factor"<---- there too... I mean it flowed a'ight, but it could be alot better, ... that's what I think your problem is..

that and your throwin' out all these odd ball words that need to be strugled to spit on flow or keep time, ... that's my half assed break down.. 1 peace

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Shit was Perfect , Ur Wordplay was on fire Fam , U had a Good Flow , and ur content was Blazing , Nice too have u on da team

smart! ur name eggsplains it all. yeh ur flow was kinda off but i think das coz how u set it out so its harder to read. but it was dead ill. keep it up.
peace~roX~

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