I Just Wrote This Up Straight..I Havn't Looked At It Twice Because I Didn't Really Want To..It Was Written With Raw Emotion And I Don't Think What Has Come Straight From Emotion Should Be Tampered With....Enjoy....Pz.....

I’m Still Fightin The Screams In Ma Dreams At Night..
Will They Get Past Sleep And Be Lit Up By My Sight..
Evidently For Some, The Nightmares Become Real..
Did God Choose To Take Life Is The Devil In On The Deal..
Sparing Times Of Daring Young Lives Cut Short..
Funny, We Snipped For Life At Birth, Snipped Twice Meet Death..
I’ve Heard That He Aint So Nice, Spirits Tell Me In The Wind..
Only God Knows Now Was It This Kid Who Sinned..
We Struggle Night And Day, Wonderin, Ponderin Truth..
Wishin He Would Swing Home Straight Like Babe Ruth..
But Its Like Emotion Not Bein Held In A Tear..
Its Like A Formal Written Letter Without Sayin Dear..
It May Or May Not Happen But We Hold Tight On The Chance..
We All Singing That I Wish You Were Here For That One Last Dance..
And There’s Ringin In My Ears Still There From The Screams..
The Force Is One Edge Short When You Apart From The Team..
That Dream Is Now Hoped To Become Reality Now..
People Sayin Just Get Yourself Together But I’m Thinkin How?..
People Prayin For The Safety And The Order Of The Light..
But It Was Like Bein On Chemo, You Might Lose The Fight..
No darkness Could Match The Shade That Covered That Night..
Seein The Events Through The Eyes Of Imaginative Thoughts..
A Life Resembling Mini Skirts, Coulda Been Cut Too Short..
We Lookin At Clocks, Coz Only Time Will Tell..
The Hands Don’t Answer, The Source Just Fell..
The Pain And The Dispair Feels Guilty At Moments..
Really We Aint The Ones Who Have To Fight The Silence..
I Speak My Name With Purpose From The Lessons..
Head Up Higher Than Crucifixions In My Presence..
Instilling The Pride Through The Ways Taught To Me..
Willing For More Days Were I Can Smile At The Thoughts Of The..
I Pop A Quiz To The Lord How Is That Angel Sent To Us?..
I Will Guide The Great Through This, Especially…Omega Genesis…

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I LIKE THE REALITY THE WAY ANYONE CAN RELATE THE IMMOTION AND HOW EXPRESSIVE IT IS

I Pop A Quiz To The Lord How Is That Angel Sent To Us?..
I Will Guide The Great Through This, Especially…Omega Genesis…

I liked how you ended this, although i really think if you went back through it and touched up a couple areas you would had a really nice spit here. I like how you ended the entire thing wit omega genesis, that in itself i find exceptionally powerful, but the ryhme itself could be reworked n reworded to give it a tighter flow. I see what you saying about not wantin to touch somethin pure, from emotions, it's true gods sense of astethics seems to be buried knee deep in imperfections, but in my opinion when it comes to lyrics or atleast as far as rap lyrics go perfection is key, you gotta have perfect cadence, perfect voice control, n perfect lines otherwise it sounds half ass, and a half ass rap lyric is more like spoken word garbage n poetry (really it's not all garbage but i care not for it). and that belongs in somebody elses culture, we ain't no fuckin beatniks here. LOL besides that this is pretty dope, I like seeing people bend the imagination to stretch reality n distort perspectives keep it up.

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^^Shit Thanx For The In-Depth Response^^ I Know Its Meant To Be All Perfect But Really..I Wrote This And Just Thought..Thats It, I Don't Wanna Touch It Again, And It Was Done, I Don't Think It Has To Be Questioned, It Was Just What I Felt To Do...Pz...

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Damn, very nice, deep n emotional too, good read and nicely structured....

props for ure finisher......

the whole piece was nice tho.....

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*Sheds A Tear*

*Walks Out Of Thread*

^^For Real^^...Uppin For Some More Views...Pz...

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UUUUUUPpppppppppiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnn!!!!!!!!!!! !!!

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Uppin once More for this slept on ish..pz..

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as every1 else said perfect drop i loved the emotion in it it was crazy good spit man later

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