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What is power?
Strength maybe? Nah, stength is what gets you through hard times Power... Is it control? Any fool can have control, but yet not hold power Power... A force spawned By the contradicting combination Of Love and Fear Power... An idea Suggesting the supremacy Of one with unique abilities Power... A decisive factor Giving an individual The voice of a population Power... A desire Held by many But held by few Power... A product Of the mind........ just me messing around...not normally my style at all but i like experimenting with different forms of poetry....never know......get at me with some thoughts... Last edited by ReccA : 07-08-03 at 08:08 PM. |
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it was good, but i didn't like the shortness of the lines,
didn't rhyme, but i don't think it was meant to, so all in all, keep it up, and lengthen your lines, peace |
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i'm glad ur back!! i always liked ur pieces....nice piece..even if it wasn't ur style..hollah..God bless..1.
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i really liked this....i didnt think u cood really express what power is but you did and you did so fluently n inteliigently...i liked also how you made the questions seem rhetorical,even though they arent....hmmm i liked the short lines it was the form of the piece n it made the piece what it was.nice job gurl
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"gurl"? lol...nah love, i think you've been a little misled......hahaha...i hope i dont really come off as a woman....anyways, thanx for the replies....the lines are short for a reason...each line connects to the next one like a sentence...but at the same time they can be a statement by themselves....at least thats wat i was going for...... Peace |
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oh yea and...its good to be back baby blues...i like that there are still some of the cats around from when i was here before...all these new names, doesnt even seem like the same site anymore...
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The recuring "power" line was an excellent touch, you conveyed the message effortlessley, and i can hardly tell if it was your style or not, it was good either way
peace
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thanx...uppin
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Heh. Most questions asked in poetry are rhetorical...
This was an interesting approach you took. And tackled the topic in an interesting way. Though i felt the start where you dismissed (albeit maybe partially) strength and control made it a bit stray. But i did feel where you were trying to go with it. ...resp... |
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thanks for the replies...always appreciated
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