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I Want To Go Home
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stuck in this world
were i hate that i am wanted there smiles around me are dreams where i am haunted constantly taunted what's time? in a place that takes forever passing by so slowly where 24 hours doesn't seem so clever frustration is hated this emotions belated my tears are so big they have become inflated my life is once unknown again as i lay here burning my back in the sand i hate this land everything turned out exactly how i planned (BAD) from the moment my plane arrived i was already deprived from this life i have to live i want to just sit and cry but i am to stubborn to give in i am begining to become homesick were i go and i am sick of home theres people around me but i feel alone to everyone i am unknown i just want to go home i began to dislike this land where time doesnt pass i just want to escape this prison from the Goodtimes of TEXASS ........................... luckily i come home in like 1 1/2 days but i am still counting down just some shit i wanted to write nothing special |
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this soundz like one of those pieces where you were just ventin' anger or stress or whatever...I got a lot of those...this was nice though...I was like "awww...poor baby" when I was reading this...but I didn't say it out loud...lol...holla
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haha....yeah prolly one of those type of writing....
after i wrote it i finally got some sleep.....but thanx for the whole"AWWW...poor baby" thing thank you for your comments too......... |
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IP: 44EA 1905
Good expression,it's always good to get rid of unwanted emotions.Where was it u were staying ?
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i was staying in San Antonio Texas and Port Aransas by the beach..........
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IP: 4C3F 1979
this like a poem
well you did vent out maad shit so keep doing you good job on this piece, worth the read if takin as a poem most def, props peace |
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interesting, ...
stuck in this world were i hate that i am wanted there smiles around me are dreams where i am haunted constantly taunted you hate that your wanted in this world? well, hmm...that's def. not good, you see last weekend i saw a guy shoot himself in his head hmm...you have smiles around you, keep good company, and umm quote time. ![]() ain't a wasteland just taste that waste sometimes depends on the angles, and how you read your lines...." :P only line i feel like talking about right now... umm the posts in my pic thread were ... immature? whatever......see you later....pz
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Word . . . .
Well, You Got A Unique Style. . . Up The Use Of Words, And Throw Some Metaphores Or what Not In, And You'd Have A Good Peice.. Quote:
Pretty Nice ... Overall Good Peice. Quote:
Those are strong words, you shouldn't throw them around as nothing.
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IP: CD9F DA9D
ummm thanks for
all the comments......and Jae the thing i wrote in sands picture thread wasnt supposed to be taken as bad i will explain it all another time but anyway thanx |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
OOOOOOOoOoOOOOOOO Eviley that was hot. you should put it in the poetry section too.
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"Love You" are strong words.
and i don't throw them around like nothing. i've said them to an amount of 2 girls in my lifetime. so yeah...
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it was a nice simple verse, made me think of whats goin on in the life of the person, so it was good.
can ya check mine out http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=65540 |
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IP: 0069 9346
thanks simple is good......
thank you for the coments i will for sure return the favor for checking this peice out |
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