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Old 07-13-03, 05:24 AM   #1
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I Want To Go Home

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stuck in this world
were i hate that i am wanted
there smiles around me
are dreams where i am haunted
constantly taunted

what's time?
in a place that takes forever
passing by so slowly
where 24 hours doesn't seem so clever

frustration is hated
this emotions belated
my tears are so big
they have become inflated

my life is once unknown again
as i lay here burning my back in the sand
i hate this land
everything turned out exactly how i planned
(BAD)

from the moment my plane arrived
i was already deprived
from this life i have to live
i want to just sit and cry but
i am to stubborn to give in


i am begining to become homesick
were i go and i am sick of home
theres people around me but
i feel alone
to everyone i am unknown
i just want to go home

i began to dislike this land
where time doesnt pass
i just want to escape this prison
from the Goodtimes of TEXASS





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luckily i come home in like 1 1/2 days
but i am still counting down
just some shit i wanted to write
nothing special
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Old 07-13-03, 05:39 AM   #2
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this soundz like one of those pieces where you were just ventin' anger or stress or whatever...I got a lot of those...this was nice though...I was like "awww...poor baby" when I was reading this...but I didn't say it out loud...lol...holla
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Old 07-13-03, 05:17 PM   #3
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haha....yeah prolly one of those type of writing....
after i wrote it
i finally got some sleep.....but
thanx for the whole"AWWW...poor baby" thing
thank you for your comments too.........
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Old 07-13-03, 05:21 PM   #4
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Good expression,it's always good to get rid of unwanted emotions.Where was it u were staying ?
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Old 07-13-03, 06:55 PM   #5
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i was staying in San Antonio Texas and Port Aransas by the beach..........
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Old 07-13-03, 07:05 PM   #6
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this like a poem
well you did vent out maad shit
so keep doing you
good job on this piece, worth the read
if takin as a poem
most def, props
peace
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Old 07-14-03, 02:18 AM   #7
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interesting, ...

stuck in this world
were i hate that i am wanted
there smiles around me
are dreams where i am haunted
constantly taunted

you hate that your wanted in this world?
well, hmm...that's def. not good, you see last
weekend i saw a guy shoot himself in his head
hmm...you have smiles around you, keep good
company, and umm quote time. "This world
ain't a wasteland just taste that waste sometimes
depends on the angles, and how you read your
lines...." :P


only line i feel like talking about right now...
umm the posts in my pic thread were ...
immature? whatever......see you
later....pz
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Old 07-14-03, 02:54 AM   #8
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Word . . . .

Well, You Got A Unique Style. . .

Up The Use Of Words, And Throw Some Metaphores Or what Not In, And You'd Have A Good Peice..

Quote:
what's time?
in a place that takes forever
passing by so slowly
where 24 hours doesn't seem so clever


Pretty Nice ...

Overall Good Peice.



Quote:
posted by sand

love you...


Those are strong words, you shouldn't throw them around as nothing.
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Old 07-14-03, 04:14 AM   #9
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ummm thanks for
all the comments......and Jae the thing i wrote
in sands picture thread wasnt supposed to
be taken as bad
i will explain it all another time
but anyway thanx
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Old 07-14-03, 12:20 PM   #10
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OOOOOOOoOoOOOOOOO Eviley that was hot. you should put it in the poetry section too.
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Old 07-14-03, 05:23 PM   #11
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"Love You" are strong words.


and i don't throw them around like nothing.


i've said them to an amount of 2 girls in my lifetime.


so yeah...
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Old 07-14-03, 05:46 PM   #12
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it was a nice simple verse, made me think of whats goin on in the life of the person, so it was good.

can ya check mine out
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=65540
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Old 07-15-03, 03:17 AM   #13
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thanks simple is good......
thank you for the coments
i will for sure return the favor
for checking this peice out
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