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[15] Fgee vs. [9] Ill Mental vs. [?] Phrantik
IP: 9588 E886
Yes he's in.
Congratulations On Winning In The First Round. Props To You Who Won. Thank You To Everyone Who Showed Up, This Is Looking Really Nice. Keep It Up............ Topic...... Inside My Pocket
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Kevin Brown
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IP: 6FA7 7304
love the topic.
hehe [?] Phrantik... ready to be eliminated?
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
how the fuck can he just roll in here and get a position?????
thats balls...but fuck it DOUBLE STANDARDS i'm in |
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Kevin Brown
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IP: 6FA7 7304
im done.
ill post after you. ill mental you still in this?
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Guest
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IP: 9FD6 17EF
yo, i just got a instant message from ill mental...... he is on vacation and the computer he is at will not let him go onto RB, Can ya give em a couple extra days to write his stuff? he said he will be back on saturday.....
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Kevin Brown
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IP: 6FA7 7304
Inside my pocket
Phrantik A nursery rhyme found in a pocket of dreams… A horror story in a pocket of screams… A love story in a pocket of hope… And a tripped story in a pocket of dope… Every pocket has a story to tell… The good the bad, the completely insane Every pocket has a story to YELL Of hopeful glee, and regretful pain… So lets look in the pockets See what we see Lets look in the pockets And set the stories free Inside my pocket lies a deeper world Where reality is twisted, distorted and blurred Where children rule with an iron fist And when you vanish your always missed Where you shrink when you grow And come when you go The pocket’s a confused little place Open my pocket and look inside But see only faces of those who have died Blood pours out as my nightmares are all set free They encompass my body as my pocket bleeds I put my hand in to stop the flow of life And remove my hand gripping the knife In a land of murder and evil death I finally lose my very last breath A poem in my pocket to express something deep Words written for her to treasure and keep My heart cant explain the way I feel still But I know its something It soon will Its love that flows from every inch of me Its my love that I finally have set free And its you I found and I want to hold So with these words consider it told …I love you. Lets escape from this world through the rabbits hole See how deep it goes, while we tumble and roll Trip over a stone, or a bone or a phone The ringing in my ears makes me know they’re not home But where have they gone, lines disappear Ask the 8 ball cause its been pocketed near The world spins and I fall, my nose bleeds I need blow Cause It brought me here and now I must go
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IP: 1540 4C6A
Hot damn dawg, that piece was sick/ Madd props
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
delve into the life of anyone....some richer some poorer
this is a day of mine… woken by movement presidents tumble from their slumber encased in finger and thumb dirt but leather bounds are a higher number cents ignore paper and dont take note, the pulp say they make no sense but they all got the vote bickering in the dark inscribed with quotes, soon the hand of destiny chooses who's needed most in their material world other objects reside lint lines their dwelling inside along with phones and all kinds of different things besides unique prints cameo depositing and withdrawing all matter faces change while others scatter, sometimes its crammed or vacant constantly thinner or fatter existence hinges on a button or belt inches to feet off ground their residence is near legs pelt, awaiting on hands to be touched and felt but daylight rarely penetrates the shaft in the blackout everyone is wearing a mask, colliding amongst themselves all random parked however the leather marauder occupies the prime space resting between the flaps its a credit place, and sheets, pics and random stuff falls between its grace through out the day digits pluck their victim down for the count the palm of limb, spends evictions and uses a rectangular block to send textual scriptures friends part ways whilst some replicas are retained clones of mint linger with dues to be paid, and fingers reach and fumble with others all day and that afternoon I met beauty and she gifted me her number inked paper parting with seared vision the precious note was stashed in Mecca's for later….. but as night forces my lids to droop i know i cant stop it unbuckled and zippered down times for the jeans to drop it and cupping the change in my pocket the round men of yester year have kept the lining in profit dawn broke and i woke up to repeat the regime but as i reached for that familiar place there were no jeans enter mum... 'Hi, I just put your pants in the machine' 'Don't worry in half an hour they'll be clean' NNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! mind clicked and beauty was now reduced to water now no writing caught her, essence drowned in a biological slaughter everything fits into the cycle even sometimes washed rattled and rolled or crumpled and squashed forgotten men when foreign hands dont check the pockets and then reappear lost you never know what part your pocket may play on your destiny….. just don't let their contents escape from your clutch |
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IP: B20F 67F7
Ill Mental Has No Showed
Saturday Is Too Late, If It Was Today It Would Have Been Good... fgee i liked your verse a lot, it had everything that was expected..nice vocab a strong flow and nice story...your stretched out bars are really annoying to read. that would be a major improvement on your part if you could shorten them up a little bit...nice job phrantik i'm left speechless, that was excellent...taking writing and doing that with it, as to exploring the different meanings of writing you possess and describing them in such a beautiful manner excellent job... phrantik won. this worked out that he was put in the tourney because ill mental didn't show...excellent job to the both of you... V. Phrantik.
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IP: 0CF3 6910
well im here and im back! if its alright with everyone i can do my verse right now since there has only been 1 vote........ i tried to contact someone but illusionist was the only one i could get ahold of...... i couldnt log into rb on the comp i had there for some reason.....
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
i say get it done quick
and sand u dropped today as well so dont say today is too late |
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Kevin Brown
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IP: 6FA7 7304
1-0. uppin for more.
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IP: F8FC 607F
Damn Nice Battle Here...And This Is The One That Sparked Some Controversy For My Prediction!...
Fgee Very Good Verse...Had Everything It Needed In There...Good To Read...Good Vocab And Consistancy...Good Job Overall... Tik *Catches Breath*...That Was A Great Verse...Feeling And Emotion Expressed Brilliantly...Vocab And Consistancy There...Great Verse... Vote - Phrantik
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Middle Weight
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IP: 6E8E 630E
okay this was a really good topical
Fgee-Had a really creative verse, it was dope, the only thing i could pick of was the format..... but it was really creative and shit Phantik-yours was great until i got to the midddle bit, like a horror movie had me scared......beautiful in its own way..... Conclusion bOth were dope i just didnt really enjoy tiks' dont get me wrong it was dope just i dunnot weid............. Vote:Fgee
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
Okay.....................
both were great, technically they were pretty muche the same vocab blah blah blah and originality from both was great............therefore my vote is for the best concept (in my view) and that has to be Fgee loved the whole perspective of being in the poct or being the pocket itself, was my fav so my vote is for Fgee] |
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