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I'm New To This Jont (introduction)
IP: D908 E866
Like I said a brotha new to the spot so allow me to get in where I fit in...........
Da kid drop prohetic flows/to enlighten/any titan/or pathetic foes/you'd think I'm ghost writin/da way my words capture ya soul/grasp it and hold/every syllable make da rapture unfold/the earth's cold/while I speak at temperatures of the planet's core/my swagger alone is an ovation, so what you standin for......wait, there's more/I stay the champ like life's a game & it got scores/no request for da fame I got whores/what I need is a woman/don't worry I'm locatin a booth what yall need is comin/my acapella's can leave ya hummin/like it came laced wit a beat/study your ghettoology I'm in the same chapter & place wit da streets/Ladies & Gentlemen welcome the heat/I'm here now don't need you to seem tense/I'm a nuisance/spelled Nu-Sense/I need your anger to remain pent Just a couple of lines....I ain't big on typin a book One, and thanks for havin me |
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IP: C87A 696F
DUDE NICE RAP YOU WILL WIN ALOT OF BATTLES KEEP IT UP
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IP: 399E F0FD
^^this coming from a biter of D12 TWICE....
dawg i aint even read a line an a half and ill tell you why you need to// type all your raps like this// from now on cuz its so much easier// to read// and dont put bars after every other words, it kills the flow...the first line should be like this: Da kid drop prohetic flows to enlighten any titan or pathetic foes// |
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IP: D908 E866
I appreciate it Son (A2Z). I ain't no internet rappin nigga. So, I'll take what you told me and apply it to my future jonts. Appreciate it.
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IP: E3E0 8D58
it was a okay piece...
you had a couple of nice multi's... but I think you need to work on ya similies and meta's |
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