--- Lemme Tell You A Little Story Of A 14 Yr Old Girl. She Lives In Cali. Drop Comments On This One. Here We Go---



Daily Expressions Are Revealed Only By Her Appearance//
She Keeps Her Fake Smile So Other Admire Her Sincerness//
No One Knows The Fear She Has Of Walking Through Her Door//
Smoke, Drugs, Drinks And Her Step-Father Lying On The Floor//
It Is All Real To Her, She Has Seen This Again And Again//
Its Like Her Fear Is Always Near, Its Like Its Her Best Friend//
She Dreams Of Having A Family With Tender Loving Care//
She Dreams Of Hugging Her Mother, But In Life, She Would Never Dare//


Hook:
She Fears More Than Any Normal Human Being
She Sees More Than Any Teen Should Be Seeing
But Shes Believing, The Dreams Do Come True
She Knows More Than Anyone, But She Doesnt Have A Clue


Shes Got More Tears Than God Could Ever Produce//
To Her Everything Is So Fake, Like A Manacin In A Suit//
She Believes In No God, She Believes In No one else//
She Believes Anything Done, It Should Be Done Her Self//
The More Anger She Has, The More Knowlege She Contains//
But She Can Never See Past That, She Holds To Much Pain//
I Only Wish I Could Of Been There That One Lonesom Day//
Becuz I Swear On Her Grave, I Could of Taken The Pain Away//


Hook: x2


I Remember Every Word She Had Ever Spoken//
She Is A Memory, She Left With Everyones Heart Broken//
June 16th Was The Day Of Her Remberance Of Birth//
Her Parents Got Her What She Wanted, It was on The List First//
Black, Silver, Very Compadable For Any Teenager to Have//
I Remember Her Stare and How She Quitely Laughed//
Oh The Pain And How She Put Up That On-Going Fight//
Only To Think, Her Number One Present Was Her First and Only Knife//


Hook: x3



Mary Bekens Killed Her Self The Day Of Her 14th Birthday. Her Parents Were Always Drunk, High, And Whatever. Sadness Remains In our Hearts...





****This Is Not A True Story****

Replies Please

some deep shit....good work keep it up

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Good lookin out...............Upppin thhis

WTF is this gay shit??u got down syndrom or some shit??that was as wack as ya gettin yo ass kicked in school 4 being a drag queen ya cumswapper





























P.S i did ur sister

^Down Syndrome - Whats That Got To Do With THis!^

Rhyming/Flow
WOW! This Shit Was Of da CHain Dawg!...It FLowed Right Off My Tounge The Whole Way Through! Not One Part Fell Off, God Damn The Flow Was Tight! You Made Good Use Of Interline Rhyming! 9/10

Vocab/Wordplay
This Shit Was Tight! You Had Well Complex Vocab In There,Killa Wordplay Too! 8/10

Concept/Topic
You Stayed And PLayed The Topic Too Dopeness! Not Once Did You Dander Away From It! .. 9/10

Overall
Can't See Anything To Improve It..A Very Well Earned 9/10

Yo everyone has said what was comming from my mind,,,,this shit is mad deep and ill,,,,,,your good at the story telling and you should keep doin ya thang!!

O.S.

first openb mic ive seen u do
and it was dam good
nice flow..deep story.....good shit

not bad......good job........aren't u that manatee chick?

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^^ Lol yeah sure if ya wanna call me that......go ahead...


Thanks for all the replies......and i dont know what the fuck crash is on, but whatever, you fucker i'll take you on anyday....battle me and lets see what happens...


RT thanks for the break down......ALl the replies are good....Thanks....

Damn Slik , dis is Grammy Material ............... I always liked your shit bigtime. You got a knack for adding visual imagery to your peices and with dis one , you brought a lot of feeling. I felt your words ................

To Crash - Hey Dipshit , she's a 14 year old Girl , show some respect , if you don't know what your talking about , keep your fucking trap shut.

Peace , Crazy E

I need votes or atleast someone to hit up my link , no schilling , only honest votes , if you don't want to vote for me , den don't , but at least check da shit out

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