LIFEs LIGHT!

i got the emotion buildin up inside, wiv the thought of a deal bein up n signed/
body shakin as I put pen 2 paper, obscene flava in my mouth, worryin n feelin more transparent than water vapour/
comensin further in a career in music, fear i'll loose it, fear money will be a catalyst 2 abuse it/
will I confuse it wiv bitches n fame, the aim of the game to stay off the windin confayer belt 2 present pain/
first album comin how will the public react, infact is there a risk of bein sacked wiv negative impact/
feedback always important from fellow artists, clense my fists, take any critasism on the chin n make a list/
to improve on a future track, don't step back, don't make it wack but avoid every obsticle which comes wiv the pack/
day by day pictures will appear wiv new visions, but wiv gud visions comes hard desisions/
life changing moments, dents in ya reputation n appearance, dodge bullets n gain respect 2 increase ya inheritance/
the games a risk, people say rappers must av flipped a disk/
cos in away hip hops like walkin the green mile, every G got a different style, so beef n confrontation cud begin 2 pile/
man walkin the streets wiv a vest ain't ideal but we love it, its r life 2 rise above it, r chest is a target so we cover it/
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man im there i've made it 2 the light, alright its been a struggle but it was never out of sight//

Yo feelin ur flow,wordplay,and tha message herre was also good,heartfelt shit.good stuff dawg.

thanx dawg, appreciated!

uppin feedback!

Rhyming/Flow
Dope, Good Use Of INter Line Rhyming, Made The Flow Stronger! Good Rhymes Too, No Flaws...8/10

Vocab/Wordplay
No Major Flaws Either! Hate Catz That Abbv. Words (i.e 2 -to, U - You), NahMean? Tight Nevertheless....7/10

Concept/Topic
Yea, As West Said - Nice Message, Well PLayed! ... 8/10

Overall
Nice Drop, No Major Dissapointments...Keep Droppin Them Like This Although Could've Been Longer, You KNow? .. 8/10

thanx dawg i'll bear all dat in mind!

uppin more feedback plz!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!

a'ight... ^ rythmic did the breakdown... so....

I was feelin' the flow, xcept, some of the lines ran on a little bit, the vocab was good, wordplay didn't really seem to be any, it was pretty str8 forward lines, like they got to the point, eg: "feedback always important from fellow artists, clense my fists, take any critasism on the chin n make a list/"...

I liked it... peace

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