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i spit mostly to keep my mind offa murder/
a lyricist in era/ where lyrical content is virtually unheard of/ its hard to discern/ sometimes the shit i keep thinking/ working double time at times to curb my drinking/ my patience is wearing thin/ at some of these weak rappers/ who attempt to avoid capture/ then get caught in the rapture/ fashion or actor?/but not a rapper/cuz this shit is MY shit/ and i know true spitting is only derived from passion/ yo/so know now why i spitter quicker/ than any nigga/liqoured/and willing able to clock figgas/ but uh/ya'll cats don't know me pose as rollies/ intentionally plotting to my demise/coldly/ but you wanna battle/get me addled/shit i'll jump back in the saddle/niggas get offed quickly like prime cut cattle so all false prophets beware/ when you see the glare/ of my nickel plated nine milli/ licking shots in the air/ leaving my foes froze by my prose/ leaving them only with thoughts of despair/ nauseous leaving a hint of caution in the air/so dawg lets take it back to basics/fatigues and ak's shit/as we all roll ride and multiply in the matrix/hatas remain nameless/enemies end up faceless/ and any nigga talking shit can get his head turned into a crator FUCK THA BLOCK |
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IP: 9B33 081B
yo somebody give me some fucking feedback please
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IP: 222F A358
Rhyming/Flow
Was O.k For The first Few LIOnes, Then Really Fell Off, To The pOint Where Hardly Anything Rhymes. Try To Keep All Your Bars The Same, It Flows Bettter - Learn About mUlti's Too And Proper Structure. I POsted A Tutorial On Structure IN The Tutorial Forum...2/10 Vocab/Wordplay Was O.k For MOst Of It, LIke Everyone You had Good n' Bad Lines, BUt Keep At IT...4/10 Concept/Topic I Didn't See How The Title Related To The Song, But Try To Keep On The Topic And Don't Fall Off....1/10 Overall 3/10 - Raed Above And Elevate, Don't Think I'm Trying To be A Hater, I'm Only Trying To Help You Elevate - You'll See That It All Works Out It The End. Word! |
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