[Audo]
Yo, MC, we gotta get this paper
I got a plan, we gonna be money capers
We’ll round up the troops, the usual crew
You know, brad, romeo, aaron, me and you
I just arrived in the city, I need a place to stay
The feds watching me, but I ain’t looking their way
You better watch cuz, your phone could be tapped
Get the guys in your place, I got the whole plan mapped
Aren’t you tired of not feeding your daughter
Ain’t you tired of eating only bread and water
How old is she now? Like 4 years old?
She bout to start school next year, and doesn’t winter get cold?
This the only way we gonna get finer things
I hate to do this, but I’m tired of hearing things
Pressure from my ex, child support bills
I have no choice but to take these bills
So if you all down, ima tell the plan, so stay
But if you ain’t daring, yo ass gotta get away
Everyone stayed, but Romeo left
I told him, “keep fighting to the death”

[emcee abilities]
I aint got no choice, im damn near broke, im tired
And sick of not being able to cop what i admire
My daughter goes to sleep without food, i cant do it
Its either Im a make this fast money, or work through it
Whys it gotta be this way? Why we gotta struggle man
Thats it, count me in this, it sounds like a decent plan

[Audo]
Aight here is the specifics of the plan
We gonna rob this bank at 6:00 flat
First Union bank on 25th street
Listen up closely or you’ll miss the beat
We go, down to tha store, pick up some masks
To conceal our faces when we grab the bags
Make sure that everyone’s got tha nines
So the unlucky bank teller is mine
We could boost a car, that’s Grand Theft Auto
Ditch the car quick and leave with our dough
Or we could head down to the DMV
Register a new van with a fake ID
So when the cops are out looking for us
Park the van on the side of the road, and take the bus
That way we throw the pigs off track
Tell me niggas what you think of that?
So right now everyone’s got the plan
Now we’ll see when it all boils down

[emcee abilities]
Its goin down tonight
im changing my life fo good
As the clock turns closer to 6:00, It darkens the mood
I realize its now or never, time doesnt wait for cowards
Other niggas before did it, its time to get ours
Park the Van quick, greet a young girl and her baby
Put on the masks, choose the teller, an old White lady
"You sure bout this, My niggas we about to go down-
Nobody hesitatin, aint nobody turnin back now"
So everyone is ready we about to leave em in mystery
we either make it out, or all us niggas is history
Guns in hand, we enter the bank, so far so good
approach the bank teller, all went well like it should
but then i noticed somethin- everything was slow and too quiet
started to panic, "They know somethin, I DONT WANNA DIE YET"
Stopped dead in our tracks, we knew we was watched from the beginning
Everything was a blur, my whole world started spinning
Looked to my left, my nigga was shocked, something was wrong

[Audo]
It was like the matrix, everything slowed down
I saw my man next to me drop and hit the ground
I looked up, and saw ropes fall
I said, “the FBI got must have gotten a call”
SWAT members stormed in the room
I knew we were in for it, my life is doomed
Gun shots rang out, I dodged and ducked
I knew right away that our asses got fucked
I couldn’t believe, that someone ratted us out
I thought we were all tight, I couldn’t picture how
I hesistated in the field, like I forgot my stance
It was too late, a bullet headed straight for my pants
My leg was burning, I got a shell in my leg
I was praying to god, I pleaded with him and begged
Next thing I knew, all 3 of my mans was down
We were handcuffed, and our faces pressed to the ground

[emcee abilities]
25 years in Prison, I cant believe I been snitched on
All I got left, is a prison cell my boy and this song
So let this be a lesson: don’t misplace ya trust
Cause Money seems to bring the Romeo out in all of us

feedback on this...............................what do you guys think..............................

i like the purpose. i like the ending....the meaning to it all. emcee i thot had some good flow. impressesd. audo was allright too, he jus newb still but you doin good. some of ur shit didnt rhyme. and some bars where longer then the others so the flow felt choppy. i liked it tho. nice drop 808.

topic has been played but you did ok flipping it to your own liking... no real critique except work on making a better flow...

keep writing...

peace...

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