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Old 07-31-03, 07:47 PM   #1
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Arrow Reignman - Diss

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FUCK reignman and his faggot grammar/
smash dis niggas head open wit a hammer.

reignman,
u need to examine ur sexuality-cuz i think u'z a fag G-
see-u've commented-on lots of shit-dun spit-just listen-
its like u askin for a girls number,people have REJECTED-uve been suspected-
of bein a faggot/
sorry for those harsh words, u can't handle it-
ur body ima dismantle it-
like a virgin fuckin for her first time-
yo pussy ass has been RIPED/
ima drop u into yo grave-yo death i will pave/
uve been shooken-tooken/your one of RBs many bitches/
fuckin wit me will leave u in stiches/



its not my best and im high real bad right now...

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Old 07-31-03, 09:55 PM   #2
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LMMFAO..WTF..were u serious?..this was horrible..the lines u did have were played..and wack..flow was simple..and wack..attempts at mutis were wack..ur end n lines didnt even rhyme..i hope u be n high took away like 100% of ur ability..im mad at myself for even read n this..u got a lot of elevate n to do..
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Old 07-31-03, 10:06 PM   #3
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look kid this is most likely your first post and probably your first rhyme so i'm gonna put it like this your shit was wack from the start. the reason i say from the start is cause that first bar had no rhythm what so ever it sounded like some shit that would have been spit baack when cats first started thinkin of rap the shit was garbage aight but let me go on every line after that got worst and worst who taught you to break bars and lines cause without the flow i couldn't tell where the fuck you tryin to rhyme and shit basically you need to go and see how other cats spit on this site that way there may be a chance for your ass to sharpen up.
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some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun
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Old 08-01-03, 08:01 AM   #4
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Hardly Any Of Your Bars Rhymed, Hardly Anyway Of Your Bars Had Any Meaning, They Had No Pertinent Concept Whatsoever, If You Wanna POst a Diss, Then At least Post Something Relevantly Decent, With Some Meaning...
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Old 08-01-03, 08:13 AM   #5
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^Exactly, basic rhyme scheme, flow was blah, opening war was pathetic, zero compl;exity, vocab was blah, no imagery, no emotion, no multi's, no internals, everything was real basic, and text disses are gay anyways.

Go away and write a piece to a set topic, like the death of a loved relative or something, thats where it'll show your real skill.

Reply To Mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=70212
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Old 08-01-03, 10:04 AM   #6
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I couldn't have said it better myself....
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