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Old 08-01-03, 01:07 PM   #1
Slim_Lanky
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"Unspoken words"

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Please tell me what you think and things i could do to improve!!! thanks a lot for the imput
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Old 08-01-03, 01:08 PM   #2
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“Unspoken Words”
-Slim Lanky-
No one ever said that it would be this way
Lyin on my floor with nothing left to say
Starin at a picture, when it was me and you
Wondering what we had put eachother threw
It was all gone within the blink of an eye
Clueless of what happened I am forced to ask why

Why does it have to be this way
Life is to short to suffer each day
I know that I need you today
I will always love you that is all I can say

I need you now like I needed you then
Please understand this is a battle we can’t win
I am lost and I need to find my way home
There is only silence just please set the tone
Remember how much we cared why can’t you see
How I loved you and you loved me
It is just a test of time I guess before it’s the end
Just always remember I love you and I am your friend

Why does it have to be this way?
Life is to short to suffer each day
I know that I need you today
I will always love you that is all I can say
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Old 08-01-03, 02:05 PM   #3
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nice peice flowed good and expressed ur thoughts. u explained ur feelins after he/she left but i think ur missin why they did. it seems uv left tha picture half drawn, uv coloured it in but its hard to see tha full picture
u get me? keep it up
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Old 08-01-03, 06:42 PM   #4
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I agree with lil Roxy..Nice drop overall...I have one question though..was this ment for a poem or a song? lol just checkin yo...Keep it up ...

peAce
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Old 08-03-03, 04:00 PM   #5
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This was actully was ment for a song, and the reason that i left the picture black was becuase i am not sure why she left.... but yea thanks a lot for the input....
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