Set Free
-Phrantik
I was having trouble writing so i wrote this.
tell me what you all think... its sort of self
explanitory...

Locked up behind bars, that i cant express.
start cutting my ribs to get a load off my chest.
i try to speak but the words dont come out.
im stuck drying up in this flowing drought.
like writers block times ten i cant speak.
looking for help anywhere, its wisdome i seek.
i count to ten, then turn and go look.
trying to find creativity.. i try reading a book.
front to end. like my life its been over.
gettin mentally blocked by psychic red rover.
no words to express, no letters can tell.
no voice escapes me, cant even yell.
i cant free my mind its a vegitable, cant move.
so i must remain looking for my "writers groove"
let the pen express, ill replace the ink.
then sit.... ??? ... i can only think...
so i start writing my thoughts, one word at a time..
and finish each sentence with a witty rhyme.
pause then keep going.. looking on for the end.
and i cna see it coming just around the bend.
with a sign right above "now leaving writers block"
and like being ungagged i can finally talk.
i read my results, and i like what i see..
im not losing my mind... just setting it free.

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^^this was dope...i like short sentenced txt and i find it hard to lower stuff that small..it reminded me of that piece u did with vortex...Writers Block one.....

Locked up behind bars, that i cant express.
start cutting my ribs to get a load off my chest.

i try to speak but the words dont come out.
im stuck drying up in this flowing drought.

i read my results, and i like what i see..
im not losing my mind... just setting it free.

^^favorite lines of the piece

short n sweet.....
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ight ima start with i dont approve of the rhyme scheme.....
i see a lot of pepz rhyming here an i just think ya should try thinkin outside that frame of reference.....okay enough said.....moving on

the only other prob is i think ya missin somethin in that first line.....itz a dope line but it seems to be missing something....

ok on to tha good......so i must remain looking for my "writers groove"
let the pen express, ill replace the ink.
then sit.... ??? ... i can only think...

lol @ writer's groove awsome word choice......

trying to find creativity.. i try reading a book.
front to end. like my life its been over.

also a dope line

there was a lot of good to this poem esp for some1 who claimed to be sufferin writaz block

Sup PhrantiK.
This was great work from you, as always. You seem to have a lot of issues with this writers block, but despite it, you still produce some great shit. My favorite lines were:

>start cutting my ribs to get a load off my chest.

>with a sign right above "now leaving writers block"
and like being ungagged i can finally talk.

^great imagery and execution.
Feelin this. Stay up and keep blessin us.
Pz Tikki.

^love gettin replies from you.
thanks to those who replied.
joka, what do you feel i could
do for my rhyme scheme?
i usually do a ABAB sorta style
but i went with somethin easy for
this cause recently i have been dying
of a bad case of writers block.. its
horrible. throw some topics. ill drop
some more pieces.. easiest way to escape
writers block is to write. so i did...

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I like getting them from you too..except ones where you're "at your friends house"...those ones are so-so

I try to speak but the words dont come out.
~Mad me Think Of Eminem-Lose Yourself~
~But You Didnt Go That Route~

How About You Just Keep Your Writers Block
And Think You Cant Rhyme....Youll Suprise
Yourself On the Regular...And Live Too*

gettin mentally blocked by psychic red rover.

~Line Sounds Good But School Me For A Minute..~
~Whats Your Version Of A Psychic Red Rover?~

Overall You Were Fine With This And Sometimes
People Need To hear You Straight Forward Opposed
To Abstract To Display Interest In Your Work......
Wanting Lyrics To Make Them Dance And Are Not
That Thought Provoking.....

Alright Piece Peace

i forgot to edit that.
i shall go now!

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uppin again. cause im cool like that.

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this was a tight piece, liked tha flow, read easily,keep elevatin and spittin.~1~

Yeah, topics been done before, by us two, lol, but you've had madd block lately, and the easy way is to write about it i guess. Ehh at the imagery and emotion, you dont have it in these type pieces but what you do have is Descriptive qualities, and the way you express how it felt to be on writers block is what shone in this, a couple nice lines of wordplay but the "Im not losing my mind, just setting it free" was dope.

Not bad Tik. .

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W o r d P e r f e c t

I loved this! The message you were sending directly contradicts the fact that Im reading this lol I felt strange reading it, because Im thinking to myself, he cant write?! But, hes writing this and its great! lol
It was so different, made me smile as I read it

i try to speak but the words dont come out.
im stuck drying up in this flowing drought.

I love this part, drying up in this flowing drought - You've used words that literally object to each other throughout the piece, and they only add to the bigger picture...Great, Great Piece.

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^thank you very, very much!

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