I THINK OF ALL MY PROBLEMS
I THINK OF ALL MY PAIN
I THINK OF ALL MY SORROWS UNTIL I GO INSANE

I THINK OF ALL THE SMILES I'VE WORN
THAT HIDE THE SORROWS UNDERNEATH
NO ONE SEEMS TO NOTICE
THAT I GO THROUGH SO MUCH GRIEF

THESE DAYS IM FEELING DISTANT
FAR AWAY AND WEAK
MY SADNESS PULLS ME FURTHER
FROM THE HAPPINESS I SEEK

IM STANDING ON A ROOFTOP
ALTHOUGH IM SCARED OF HEIGHTS
IM WATCHING THE CARS BENEATH ME MOVE
AND SOMEHOW THIS DOESN'T FEEL RIGHT

NOW I'M THINKING OF WAT IM DOING
I KNOW I SHOULD FIND A WAY
TO BEAT THROUGH MY DEPPRESSION
WILL I BE ABLE TO SOME DAY!?
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TELL ME WAT U THINK AND WEN IT COMES TO IT ILL RETURN THA FAVOR AIGHT THANX
~Pz

Somewhat Thought Provoking Piece Of Poetry
And Something That Many Of Us Can Relate To

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Your Poetry Was Well Written Through And Through
I Hope Things Work Out For You In Life

Peace

thanx 4 tha reply

nice,short adnsimple,had emotion,had good rhyme through out it didnt fall off,keep droppin,peace boo.

umm excuse me BITCH but u should stop posting so many poems, check teh rules you're only allowed two poems on the first page, just thought i'd holla at u before a mod caught it, jsut chill out, now to the piece....
I like questioning poems because they make the reader think though in a not so subtle way lol. umm wasnt funny but anyway i really can see wut ur feeling cause Lord knows a nigga been there before but i feel like u didnt let that rawness that emotion has come thru enough, in a poem i like to look into a kaleidoscope but this poem was more like looking thru glass, it has potential but that flavor isnt there, props though, and could u gimme a feedback on my piece, thanks, 1luv.