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Old 08-06-03, 02:31 AM   #1
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I see you
you see me
comfortably float into we

Want to be you
you be me
create the new, trinity


i know probably nobody will even look at this...it doesn't matter.
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Old 08-07-03, 06:27 AM   #2
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I like this, soooooo simple and light... took me about 2 seconds to read it, but provoked me enough to sit here and think about it for the last 5 minutes.
I like the idea of there being a You, a Me, and a We combined to make a trinity, instead of just the age old 'you and me become we'... Theres alot I could write about this one, but I dont want to complicate it, as the simplicity is what makes it so provoking.
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Old 08-07-03, 12:30 PM   #3
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ahahah thats was simply straight...to tha point..but yet not outlining tha point...nice post
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Old 08-07-03, 09:00 PM   #4
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It was a short caress on a part of me that is probably most 'tender'. Nothing much else to say. That's what it was to me. Short, but nonetheless it did it's 'job'.

Like a quick cool breeze on a hot summers day, as you walk through the streets sweating. The breeze only lasts a couple of seconds, but it provides relief (well i say that, but i don't get as 'hot' in the hot sweltering sun as other people..but still relevant..as the breeze still usually provides a nice, gentle relief of sorts...a 'change' i guess you could say...)..

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Old 08-08-03, 09:10 AM   #5
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I aint gonna play.

Something tells me you can do a whole lot better.

I really hope you try and succeed.

~Shalom~
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Old 08-08-03, 10:24 AM   #6
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umm this is shit.....why waste our time with it?

try droppin a real piece i bet it would be good......
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Old 08-09-03, 06:57 AM   #7
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i loved it. for those who didn't like it they obviously have trouble reading in between the lines the simplicity made it more poignant. one of my favorite reads since i've been on this site.1
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Old 08-09-03, 10:45 PM   #8
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uhhhh, what are you people doing responding to this? i know this is short. it does take about 2 seconds to read. it took about 3 to write. and i do agree with the Jok and Nec-ho cause you could only like this is you felt the way i was feeling when it forced itself outta me.
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Old 08-11-03, 02:56 AM   #9
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dont do shit like that then cause you never gonna elevate if you force short pieces that havent had time taken on them.~1~
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Old 08-31-03, 05:47 AM   #10
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Was that about inter-course ???

lol i ain't in2 poetry but that was weird....

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