approachin ma destination n target,, encroachin on dis territory//

FLASH BACK

when i was a boy wid ma toy gun shootin shit for fun//
got older n colder thought i could do this for real for fun//
lock n load aim n point,, shoot ma lead from point,,,, blank//
but i didnt wanna be a criminal,, so i got ma signal from the heavens above//
and discov-erd the army,,, bitch of a girl said i was barmy to go//
but fuckit off to the army i go//

CURRENT TIME

sneak the corner,,,, poke ma head for a peak round it//
ahhh satisfaction their he was i had found it//
ma enamy terrorist,, hated the G so much,,//
i whanted to punch him wid ma fist's//
but i was a proffesional,, await the signal//
their it is GO GO,,, runin round da corner//
aimin as i go,,, target froze wid fear//
i better prepare we are gettin near//
so close i can smell his fear,,,,,,,,//
fucker drops to his knees n begins to prey//
i hear maself shoutin HEY GET UP MUTHA FUCKER//
PUT YA FUCKIN HANDS WHERE I CAN SEE UM//
he did,, dis G had killed thousends//
men woman and children,, all inocent//
im so close now im about 5 feet away//
we stand make eye contact,, silence//
athompsphere is heavy n weighin me down//
i stand n stair n say u got any idea wat u done//
he begins to beg tells me of his son//
thats when it hits me all men got a family//
diss cat was doin as he was told//
prolly if he didnt he wouldent grow old//
death from his boss or fight us//
no choise either way resembles death//
i add pressure to ma trigger//
i was gunna be da hero nigga//
but i froze n ma feelings aroze//
i was in da middle of da fro's//
of killing a man who hadent lived//
faced death every day,, now he had to pay//
was this fair,, no way,, i wasent the judge//
i was the exocutioner,, i was standin//
swayin in da wind,, killin dis man for he had sinned//
seemed logical,, so i closed ma eyes//
squeezed ma trigger,, two short burts//
opend ma eyes he was slumped.....//
bullets had thumped him in half//
he was alive n started to laugh//
looked at me n thanked me,,,,,,,//
said i had done him a fava....//
called me his saviur,,, ? i was confuzed//
he said i faced death every day//
whatch ma brothers die wid dismay//
i new this day would come..//
im dying now i got nothin to fear//
u have given me life of a differant kind//
then i relised,, all these so called evils//
where just doin as they where told//
if they didnt they would die out in da cold//
all these men had families who where prolly held//
i was ponderin now,, couldent stop wonderin how//
shit goes down like diss in the world///
ur home is green n clean,, nothin to fear//
no capitives held in fear.....//
where as these men where born to be killers//
10 million more sends ma spin into spasms...... of jitters..

I like this drop man it was nice flo I liked the wordplay and overall flo ...good drop hit up dis battle

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ty uppin

tight song.......the concept of this piece was good, good way of telling what was going through this dudes mind...

Nice concept behind tha song and nice way of explaining what is going on and use of imagery but tha flow was off and it made it boring and hard to get into tha song. Fix ya flow up and it would be a nice piece....6.5/10....

Give me some feedback on my shit "Get Away"

lol ^^ flow was their son but it was choppy,, its that kinda track,,,, uppin 1

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