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Old 08-12-03, 12:32 AM   #1
LaDy TrInItY
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Without You

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Spinnin round through a chaotic funnel of tearful moans.//
The past is full of coldness connected with the futures spiritual tones//
Its gotten low now that you've gone to tha next world.//
I used to be ya girl you always tryin to get me the picture perfect pearl.//
To place around my neck to connect all tha love we had.//
Its kinda sad, I gotta think about you being my long lost fan.//
Cuz when i remember it was me and you chillin with ya dad.//
All I can do is cry cuz u fadin out like a fad its gotten so bad.//
Why can't you be here to wipe off all these tears and calm my fears.//
Now theres no one ta cheer and I can no longer be near.//
Anything that reminds me of you and the thoughts that now should be through.//
All of these feelings are so new when happiness in my life is long over due.//
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Old 08-12-03, 12:42 AM   #2
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not bad..best thing ive read on here tonight..and i just replied to like 4 or 5 others..flow was ight..pretty simple tho..sad..bad..dad..see what im say n?..use better multis..topic was cool..some deep ish..but im confused..is the person dead?..or is ur friendship fading?..never really made that too clear..and was it male or female?..im assume n a lost love..somethin to that affect..a good read tho none the less..keep drop n..
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Old 08-12-03, 01:02 AM   #3
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just had to get iish off my mind..thanx tho
...........simplicity also uncovers depth..but i'm mainly a poet so sorry
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Old 08-12-03, 06:49 PM   #4
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tight piece,enjoyed readin it.~1~
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Old 08-12-03, 06:53 PM   #5
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yo it was kool, keep postin

\much luv
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Old 08-13-03, 03:55 PM   #6
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thanx kids
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Old 08-13-03, 04:01 PM   #7
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i like it better then when I read it on aim.... it does have a better flow, descent vocab, stayed on topic.... some lines were a little cluttered... but overall I liked it...

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Old 08-13-03, 07:24 PM   #8
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thanx papi
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Old 08-13-03, 08:02 PM   #9
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man i gotta get outer here to much sad shit / nice piece/ y da fuck people like yourself don't write more shit about happy shit instead of fucking wit my soul nice piece
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