.....from good to evil, rich and poor, strong and weak...theres
always two sides to every story....so to that we flip a coin....to
see the inner child in us....who sometimes is forced to hide at a
young age....forced to grow up quick to the one thats allowed to
progress and grow strong....


inner beliefs are destined to express out anger and rage
disabling growth when tribulations entrap a child in a cage
flippin a coin exposing the reasons to the way that we are
inner child being revealed as the truth to why we drifted afar


13th Disciple

Constant mourns,my child was deprived at the time of being born
Jesus died on the cross..I was created bearing a crown of thorns
Scourns..from being broken and tattered...wit abusins and batters
Trail of my life scattered,no reachin heaven even wit Jacobs ladder
Future didn't matter....how can it when opportunity never knocked
Instead found myself in the bed.....wit bruises from rocks in a sock
Leap Years set on my clock....cuz my inner child hesitated to grow
At the age of eight being raped...can make anybody mentally slow
Looked forward to below.....to Hell..to Hades....a place of retreat
'Yes!..I know I'm Beneath U!',while gettin stomped by daddys feet
Never accept defeat?!.......Shit, inside of me I already been killed
A walkin...talkin ..corpse because my bloods already been spilled
Not needin a time to be healed.......but quicker time to the end
My Inner Child dependin..attemptin on my fleshly being to befriend



inner beliefs are destined to express out anger and rage
disabling growth when tribulations entrap a child in a cage
flippin a coin exposing the reasons to the way that we are
inner child being revealed as the truth to why we drifted afar


Bribeone1

Perceptions of progress through the mind of a child-
Makes me sit back and just,... admire Time for a while-
Hes Just sorta wild,.. at instants, but stays within... keepz distance-
Shy, Afraid to speak at times,.... needs assistance-
Feeds off resistance and finds excuse to get mad-
Resentful but yet repectful.... funny how many moods, this kid has-
All this emotion fuels my Inner and helps it Elevate and grow strong-
Give it help and support crooked plant wont go wrong-
Have had it all given, Ever since God gave Me the right of Livin-
Household, Friends, Family all Used to Lavish Life & No Sinnin-
Thinnin emotions leave to Irrational Emotional Behaviour-
So Much Good, When Evil comes,..In time Ill Need a Saviour-
Feed a Hater with Greed 2 Watch Me Seek enlightment & succeed-
Funny How Different type of Eyes Seem 2 make this Child Bleed-


inner beliefs are destined to express out anger and rage
disabling growth when tribulations entrap a child in a cage
flippin a coin exposing the reasons to the way that we are
inner child being revealed as the truth to why we drifted afar

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holy shit...


this was pure fire...


both you you brought your A game here and it shows..

unlike most open mics, you guys had the basics down the whole time (flow, vocab etc..)

but where this really shined is when you both opened up..let out all of that personal ish and made it work. most of the time when people make stuff like this it seems like whining..but this here...this seems like art.

i am proud to be in the same crew as you 2.

10/10

ooo Sick Collab right here......This has too be one of the sickest collabs that I have ever read...........The concept of this was Nice........It's like both of ya all verses clicked together , And ya all stayed on topic and never went off track............Both emcees had Nice wordplay and a good amount of Vocab Usage........The chorus was clicking wit the concept of this Piece....And I liked that...

So Much Good, When Evil comes,..In time Ill Need a Saviour-
Feed a Hater with Greed 2 Watch Me Seek enlightment & succeed-
Funny How Different type of Eyes Seem 2 make this Child Bleed-

^^^^My Favorite Lines......The Wordplay was Amazing!!!
Overall I give this collab a 10/10..............Nice shit...Keep spitting

Return the favour http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=72854

jeez.. u guys are dickrode SOOOOO bad.


this was ok...but mediocre i would have to say.

my reasons? well. . .

it was kinda siplistic rhyme scheme, u havnt used many poetic techniques to gain the readers empathy.

for example

"Instead found myself in the bed.....wit bruises from rocks in a sock"
there was soooo much more that could be done here. u could have created an imagery for the bruising to allow the read to feel where ur coming from. instead u just said it.

with 13ths piece it just seems like u was listin a loada bad shit what happened to ya. u had that "crown of thorns" shit goin on... but to be honest its played.

"Give it help and support crooked plant wont go wrong"

sorry yo.. but what the fuck is that. it dont even make sense. was crooked the best word u could have used?? help n support? c'mon man, make me think.

well it appears u guys are rode WAY to hard. as for the piece, it seemed more like a check list rather than an explanation. i'm feelin the topic but the vocab use was dispicable.


no hate tho, just my opinions

yep your gay ^^

13th, Bribe.. i gotta give props where they can be given.. great shit.. 10/10 or course.. felt to tha fullest

BluePriNT u're a dumb mutha fucka........How can u say we dick rode , It was our opinion that this piece was sick........And ur opinion was that this piece was weak............I respect ur opinion , so u gotta respect mines......U dumb fool!!!!!!!!

no beef or nothin.


but how can u give 10/10 to the most simplistic rhyme schemes.
thats why i said u rode. and the way motherfuckers run around like he's the best on here...its riding. u said they had nice wordplay?...what wordplay?

as for "thug" whyte.. ur an idiot, at least i gave feedback other than "dope drop, keep it up"... so who's gay?

peep ~~~~> this

Thug Whyte, What Kinda Reply Was That....

Blueprint, Rhyme Scheme Was Dope!, But You had Some Valid Points..so..meh...

Rhyming/Flow
Both Mc's Verse Flowed Smoothly, Disciple's I Felt Came Out Stronger, He Had Mad Inner Bar Rhymin', Brib's verse Was Good Too, But I felt 13th's Came Out Top...9/10

Vocab/Wordplay
Lack Of Worpdlay here, But Vocab Was Sick, You FReally EXpressed The Animosity In This Piece, With Words Like: "Rage, Stomped, Mentally Slow, Afraid, Resistance" etc.... Both Of You Hit Hard With The Right Words here....9/10

Concept/Topic
Brutal Topic! Nice n' Original, You both PLayed It Out Well, As If it'd happened To You.. Well Hope This Didn't:"At the age of eight being raped"..lol, 13th You Played The Scared Sorta Darky Character, n' Brib Had The Reflection (lookign Back) into It... Was Dope As Fuck!....9/10

Overall
9/10, Lacked Wordplay Thats All, The Hook was Dope Too, Related To All Aspects Of the Story...Dope..

Word!

Blueprint....go hate on someone elses thread............

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Ya all gotta return the favour http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=72854

expect nothing less from you both, this is real sick, props given to both, concept of collab was good....nothin bad to crit on cuz 13 and bribe both killed it..respect

rythmic, blueprint... ya'll are gay.. open mics aren't like battles.. son i seen a good piece didn't have much time to reply so i just told 13th and bribe what i thought of their piece.. You expect me to break it down like..

Metas -
Vocab -
Punches -
Wordplay -

No didnt think so.. Just letting these cats know that their piece was sick.. fuck off






















Y'all are sippin on that haterade

Uppin thanks for the feedback, and the hater well it is your opinion.but I do notice u like to hate on everyones work..O well..uppin for more feedback..Thanx

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Indeed... Av is impressed...