The Day I Die

Living my life day to day and oblivious to whats coming next
Flawed in all aspects, all my actions served just to gain respect
Mindlessly Walking on my block, just another day like the rest
Suddenly im staring down a glock, like im staring straight at death
My body’s frozen but my mind thinking like its never done before
A lifetimes thoughts in a split second in time.. I wish I had more
Full of hate and Cold malice as he holds his weapon and sniggers
After he pulls that trigger, what’s next becomes to hard to figure
It comes down to, does heaven really exist?, or is life just a dream?
All false, I never tried to resist to see things only as they seemed
Still unable to grasp, All these opinions but still no solid facts
Trying to search within myself, and use my mind as a map
Under attack, with all these questions but there’s no time to ask
Insecure, I was never real just lived my life under a mask
Living aimless, all I saw were the obstacles and not the right track
Wondering when this life ends will my soul be coming back
But Its faith I lack, I saw no straight path, just a tunnel right to hell
Dealing in evil, the currency of death, like I had souls to sell
Its too late I can tell, my fate lies where only the devils dwell
The bullet fell, the trigger is pulled and pistol smoke fills the air
End of despair the screams r gone and I lay there as if nobody cared

damn son that shit was deep
all respects dawg
that was some true deep shit

thx dawg,...............................lookin for some more replies....this is my first attempt, so only constructive critisms....................

uppin............................................. ...................-.................................................. ...........

Full of hate and Cold malice as he holds his weapon and sniggers
After he pulls that trigger, what’s next becomes to hard to figure

VERY GRAPHIC PHILOSOPHICAL AND REAL........

My body’s frozen but my mind thinking like its never done before
A lifetimes thoughts in a split second in time.. I wish I had more

YOU PUT ME THERE WITH YOU AND I COULD FEEL YOUR THOUGHTS

But Its faith I lack, I saw no straight path, just a tunnel right to hell
Dealing in evil, the currency of death, like I had souls to sell

PERFECTION

OVERALL I SO NO LACKING IN THIS I GIVE IT A TEN AND UPPIN IT TO SEE MORE FROM YOU IF YOUR LOOKING FOR A CREW IM RECRUITING FOR ONE I JUST STARTED.

thx..preciated....upiin for comments on this.............................................. .................................

tight ass ish...i write like dat when i'm down.....dats sum tight shit......keep dropp'n dawg....1ne

thx dawg.............................................. .........uppin.................................... .................................................. ..............................................

that was deep emotional song...very well done i liked the emoptions an expressions you made it come alive great song masn 10 out'a perace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

thx dawg last up on this piece............................................. .................................................. .................................................. .........

Very deep. It conveys a powrful emotion, unlike most of the rap trash that gets played on the radio this actualyl has meaning. Keep it up, man. Keep it up.