the lyricalz-I'm-stressin... ain't just wordz-in-a-track
they the wordz that you heard-when-I-snatched
all ya material-possesionz...my spiritual's-infectin' ...
the mindz of herbz-on-the-wax now it's ya turn-to-get-jacked...
stealing is easy especially if you learn-with-a-gat...
you gotta learn-to-get-jacked or get in a turnicate-fast...
if you lucky you don't get the burner to turn-you-to-ash...

damn-these-little-whorez...the only way you'd catch me "bitin' barz" is if I just stole chocolate candy-from-the-store...

I don't jack "chickz barz" but I do jack "crow-barz"...
actually I don't jack no barz unless I wanna jack ya ho'z car...

I go to the liquer store and leave bottlez of Remy-dispersed...
by the end-of-this-verse ho'z can't help but wanna gimme-they-purse...

I stole 20 Lo sweaterz with 20 matchin'-hats...
you can't have a Gucci fit without the hat-to-match...
I went to the register and tried to snatch-the-cash...
pulled out the gat-in-fact when the gun blasts just imagine-that...


I'm tryin' out a new style so my barz would be even...lol...this is another freestyle...but this time it ain't really late night like my other open mics...it's only 11pm...lol...holla wit' feedback...

I must say this was good cause you stayed with the topic
the vocab was there, and you chose well which ones to you
the whole thing looked like it was just filler for your multies, but since they were good it didnt look bad

7/10

yeah...this was all off the dome...as are all of mu open mics...but I wasn't really aiming for punchez in this verse...I got a coupla metaphorz but my main point of this was to just stick to the topic...

oh shit...I'm campaining to be a mod too...but I can't get on my name that has all the props with it...lol

yo i liked! i like how you kept the topic goin throughout.

check out this battle votes appreciated
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...1020#post751020

He said the same exact thing i wanted to say, it was a nice piece fam! keep it up

thanks man...uppin'...

not a bad piece, stayed on topic.. id give it a 5 but pretty good dawg. keep this shit up i like em keystyled. later edit it and add more.

extend it some but a good read your word usage is fantastic

thanks y'all...this was all off the dome...I guess I'ma extend it some more when I spit next...lol...it would be easier than makin' a new thread...

you good at open mics dawg, i can never think about what to write about, i cant stick to a subject for long and you just did that. props dawgy. be EZ

the subject is stealing...lol...I am the King of Thievez...jackin' someone is something I think about on aa regular basis...lol

uppin'...

still uppin'...