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Old 09-02-03, 12:51 PM   #1
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RythmicTendicies : ha..ha...Now Reppin' The aNb, F-f-f-f-Freestyle...

Sometimes At Night, I Wanna Hold n’ Kiss You...
I Wanna Fight, Then Reminisce n’ Miss You...
You’re my Rose, I’m A Man Of Concrete...
Repeat I Love You Until Hell Impossibly Froze...
We’re Just 2 Lost Souls, With Passion Hotter Than Crete...
I Take A Back Seat, Not Knowing What To Expect...
But I Treat You With Uncontrollable Love n’ Respect...
Elect me As Your Saviour, Let Me Take You Out –
Of This Trailer, Spoil You With Riches n’ Kisses...
I’ll Fulfil Your Wishes, Incredible Like The Loafs n;’ Fishes...
To You Am I Just Nothin’, Least In This Song I’m Something...
Am I Just Frontin’, Or Am I Just Running... (away)
From Your Voice, Cos I Got Nothin’ Intellectual To Say...
Show Me The Way, May Your Love Show Me A Light...
May It Show Me Everything Right, Brighten My Mental Night...
Restore My Blinded Sight, Love Me, And I’ll Recite...

[Sung] x2
Girl, I Love Everything About... (you)
For You, With Tyson I’d Go 10x a Bout...
I Just Wanna Take You Off The Rack...
If I Loved You, Would You Love Me Back?...

Sometimes At Night, I Wanna Hold n’ Kiss You...
I Wanna Fight, Then Reminisce n’ Miss You...
You’re my Rose, I’m A Man Of Concrete...
Repeat I Love You Until Hell Impossibly Froze...
Knowing Me, Knowing You, What We Do...
Respect So High, But yet So Few...
I’m At My Last Temptation, Problems I’m Facin’...
After The Club It’s The After set, Lovin’ Vet..
Greatest Women I Ever Met, Love Me Yet?...
Show Me The Way, May Your Love Show Me A Light...
May It Show Me Everything Right, Brighten My Mental Night...
Restore My Blinded Sight, Love Me, And I’ll Recite...

[Sung] x2
Girl, I Love Everything About... (you)
For You, With Tyson I’d Go 10x a Bout...
I Just Wanna Take You Off The Rack...
If I Loved You, Would You Love Me Back?...
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Old 09-02-03, 12:55 PM   #2
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the hook fell short the verses on the other hand were perfect your words the depth of their magnitude is enough to woo any woman into what being a man is aboute.you grasped the concept so well this would be just as ill in letter format.

you continue to impress me with you lyrs rhythmic
definetly this gets the ups
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Old 09-02-03, 02:20 PM   #3
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yo i thought it was a dope idea just a bit more work.........good shit
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Old 09-02-03, 02:42 PM   #4
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yo as others have said i think this lacked a little sumthin,but i did like the hook and tha verses were also well constructed and contained what they should have
e'g,wordplay,message,expression,i jus felt maybe a lil more on tha second verse would have been better,but it was a descent drop.

Peace
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Old 09-03-03, 11:59 AM   #5
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thanx, ^this wuz one of the freestyles i was talking about..lol^ funny when and where you get inspiration from
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Old 10-02-03, 02:51 AM   #6
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im with WP here
the 1st verse was not a good as the 2nd
hook was ok, but i know you can do better
topic was..well...played
damn thats not good feedback...shit

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83050
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