this shit's only a rought draft..
ima fix it up tommrow afta school
maybe add some more too it
but leme know if im going in the right deirection
-(p)(e)(a)(c)(e)-

someone seems to always have something to say, if lifes trully a game, ive forgotten how to play
its scary when they dead up, you set up, slowing prepapinrg for the next'head-up'
living life, one eye over my sholder. now it's the weight of the world, not just a bolder.
mentally my mind can express, a lyrikal mind game more strategic then chess.
fear embraced but deffinatly not shown, every chance ive ever gotten i've blown.

jaw up
fears high
dont show that shit
and you know why...
{repeat 2x}

mom's a phyco, punched twice last night.i dont hit da ladies. so she won that fight.
mentally though, i over-rule, spit something so complex even tupac's (r.i.p) gunna drool
mental metaphysics, thats just a metaphor, just like my futures the next room over except i cant find the door
cant you see the see complexity bursting within me, live life another year. a tru thugs plea.


(yeah thats only alittle bit of it)
Ill let ya know when its done

yo for a rough draft it's got potential,liked mostly everything,it flowed,had multies,some wordplay and good vocab,flowed from my tongue and was a simple peice but a good read.Another verse and tha chorus again would make a song.

Peace

Nice drop yo......... definitely will make a good song............
Keep ya head up..........


PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~>

g00d l00k'z wit all da f33dback

someone seems to always have something to say, if lifes trully a game, ive forgotten how to play
its scary when they dead up, you set up, slowing prepapinrg for the next'head-up'
living life, one eye over my sholder. now it's the weight of the world, not just a bolder.
mentally my mind can express, a lyrikal mind game more strategic then chess.
fear embraced but deffinatly not shown, every chance ive ever gotten i've blown.

jaw up
fears high
dont show that shit
and you know why...
{repeat 2x}

mom's a phyco, punched twice last night.i dont hit da ladies. so she won that fight.
mentally though, i over-rule, spit something so complex even tupac's (r.i.p) gunna drool
mental metaphysics, thats just a metaphor, just like my futures the next room over except i cant find the door
cant you see the see complexity bursting within me, live life another year. a tru thugs plea.
Hoodie up, coated in nothin but black, Wipe the sweat dawg, We aint sellin crack
Its bulls shit but i can relate to weed , like my life it started as a seed, only to be burned and thrown away it has no [need].
My physical featurs stay, as my mind feels free to wonder away
in class i dream of the day being done, walking home wit heat in the back, and i dont mean the sun.

Jaw up
fears high
dont show that shit
and you know why...
{repeat 2x}

in conclusion, just imagine confusion, take life no matter what it can shoo-in.
think twice before each step, be equiped, and not easly tricked
enjoy each moment, because your future, you dont own it.
be prepaired. take shit serious. be respected, not dilerious.
ejoy life. think twice, dont "bet your life on dice"(dont gamble your future)
with every messeage theres a the end my freind ...

the end