Ayo,i come thru hard as fuckin a bitch from the back/
shit is tight as a virgin when she gettin stab/
Dominican Niggaz bring hard as Dmx's TrAcks/
I do like Verizon Wireless u gon hear me everywhere no matter where im at/
this kids think shit is eazy/
cuz they beg me on they knees tryin to peace me/
thats why they come and "please me"/
BElive me/
ur flow is like school work nobody wants to hear ur piece B/
i come thru,and they made me choose/
is it fuck that nigga or fuck you 2/
what u think i choose/
juss brake into ur crib kill this mothafucka and let it loose/
think im wack think twice/
homie ima sell mo' numbaz than i fuckin dice/
my dick gon always be in ur mouth juss like toothpaste/
so kill that nigga in his own house wit my new K/
When i got guns in hand "Lumidee style"/
"NEVa Leave U" thats why they call me "Gun WilD"/
Nigaa Ima BE on ALl The Places U At/
ima be on ur side like smiles faces when u postin ur Slashs[/]/
When im out wit my homiez to Mac Niggaz/
I GEt mo' blocks than JERmaine O'neal My NIgga/
Im oUT







TEll Me if IS IIGHt,cuz i think its betta than my last shit!!!!!~1~

uppin THIs shit,i reply to all yall mothafuckaz and yall dont even REply TO my shit,so fuck yall lol

it was pretty good... i think you cud devolap a lil more vocabulary...an a lil better flow..it fell off at points..but like us al...elavate.an keep writtin it'll help yah increase structure an shit lates

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it was real predictable, i think i have read better from you. you need to get some multi's in there, and explore vocabulary. metaphores and similies, you gotta fuck em up with english calss dawg, keep tryin.
it was long enough and structured well, on the otherhand.

iight iight,Upp'n This SHIT!!!

i thought the shit was pretty damn good, the vocab was fine, the wordplay was aight, but just keep elevatin dawg ur doin good. keep postin

THis Is PRetty Good,U hit hard wit basic words "u got a lot of shit to say" like:
"i do it like verizon wireless u gon hear me everywhere no matter where im at/" and the lumidee style shit,and also the JErmaine Oneal [blocks shit]

oh and "the dick on ur mouth everyday like toothpaste shit is HOT!!

uppin uppin PLEASE!!!sO to all ppl that said that my battle piece is wack I KNOw Is WACK,but this is betta right?

my dick gon always be in ur mouth juss like toothpaste/
^^^
bitten from loyd banks g-unit...dj envy mixtape

*im in a bitches mouf every morning like tooth paste*

lol

well i neva heard that song B4 plus it aint the same ~1~!

yo just work on yo vocab and word play a little bit and youll be tight keep elevatin my nigga

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biters blow but other than that it was aiight.nothin i cant say that EVERYBODY hasnt already covered.aiight drop,keep elevatin.~1~