Some thinking shit. the home girl just got shot dead. she was only 15.... holla back

some feedback would be appreciated.

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well let me just start off by saying that it was ill,,
very good topic,,i did like the martin luther king speech at the end,,that was a nice added piece with that right there fam,,
overall ill drop in my eyes,keep bringing that dogg,,
and postman,i made this ill beat yesterday you gotta go peep it,,
and yo dogg keep intouch with me fam...and be safe son...holla.
peace..

thanks fo the feedback.. even tho i usually comment on almost everyones tracks i still dont get no love.. ah well.

Pretty good..beats chillin, some creative lyrics, u could be alittle louder thats about it..i like the hook peace.

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This Is Aiight...Spittin On A Real Topic...Flow Is A Little Choppy...Delivery Is Aiight...I Reckon Your Voice Is Heaps More Suited To Commercial Shit, Got That Smooth Potential To It Uh...Lyrics Are Aiight On This...Quality Is Pretty Poor But Fuck So's Mine haha...Yeah This Was Alright Just Keep Workin At It And Improve Ya Flow And Delivery Mun..Lyrics Will Follow...Pz...

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this is tite... spittin on real topics n shit... ur qualities pretty bad... lyrics were tite... feelin this.... nice track homes

can u peep my shit please.... thread called New Track

Your on some real shit and all....but your flow is choppppy as hell...your hittin a snare..then a kick..then the hats...you got too many words in some bars..and not enough it others....

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yea... i wasnt even worryin about delivery and shit on here. i had sumtin ineeded to say... plus i had 30 minutes to write and record the track..... so yea.. thanx fo feedback.. anymore would be nice.

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Real Topic No Doubt...Voice Is Ehhh...Flow Is Choppy...Lyrics Are Purty Solid...Schemes Nothing Complex But Purty Solid....Last Part Of The First Verse Was Purty Sickk..Chorus Is Decent...Second Verse Solid As Welll..First Verse Was Better But Solid Nonetheless...Work On Emotion, Flow And Production..Speech Was Cool..

martin luther king? dats wat caught my attention
ya flow is a liol choppy? on and off na mean
i dont enjoy ya voice but fuck it its coo
i like the beat but you didnt sound proper on this...it sounds like u rushin words on some parts, like you tried to record your whole verse in one shot, that might cause the rushness
still hear no martin luther king
lyrics are str8 but the laid back emotion is not doin it, need emotion wen talking about pain

ahh i hear him
fuck ive been lookin for a martin luther king smaple too
i hate you lol

overall not bad but ya need to up your personal rhyme scheme, once you do that then your set

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fa sho dont trip... i was mad rushin this track my nig. had to be wrote/recorded in 30mins for reasons. i had to do it all in one shot feel me... beon the look out this weekend fo some ill shit. thats not my usualy flow.. im more of a locksmith hype fast pace type mofo...