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Old 09-14-03, 03:48 AM   #1
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Ecstacy (Short Story)

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Shit all started when you departed ripped up my heart and threw it away discarded/
All of my feelings hopes and cares seen false from all them dirty looks words and swears/
But now that you're gone my heart became strong and it wasnt too long before a new love was born/
Wasn't weird it was normal kinda informal meeting this chick was like something paranormal/
Out of this world the new one took my heart swore to me now that she'd never break it apart/
At first it was growin the love started showin but when a heart reacts to infactuation thats when the emotions start blowin/
Up like a bomb, New this shit was on, When I met her mom, Single parent who owned a nearby salon/
Manicures and makeovers no time for the daughter/
Showin a child no love is like puttin her through emotional slaughter/
This girl I thought was rare but in the end it was all there, Her love was also fake totally nothin there/
Had a rough life growin up, it started showin up, Anorexic since twelve everything she ate started throwin up/
This girl had issues constantly goin through tissues her life was so hard constantly writing to her father dear daddy I really miss you/
Father in prison from a murder or maybe it was a felony, A clue was missin something she wasnt tellin me/
A secretive life full of pain and full of strife thats why she wasnt allowed in the kitchen her mother hid the knife/
Wanted to slice her main vein, Im thinkin this chick's insane what did I do to deserve this God is this a game?/
This Bitchs is goin nuts, I'm talkin nuckin futs, I'm goin crazy myself speakin of this slut/
My celly keeps ringin, I look at the ID, Its her, I go online the bitch's im'in me/
I put her on block, Bitch get off my jock your crazy, What the hell was I thinkin when I called you "Baby"/
You got problems girl solve em and get away from me/
This is just a story about a girl named Ecstacy/
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Old 09-14-03, 03:52 AM   #2
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I feel you on this one dogg. I was really surprised by the ending. All in all it was a good piece.

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Old 09-14-03, 04:58 AM   #3
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thanx uppin 4 comments
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Old 09-14-03, 05:19 PM   #4
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any more comments?
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Old 09-14-03, 07:35 PM   #5
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nice
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Old 09-14-03, 11:08 PM   #6
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great visualizations on that slick rick tip lovin it bring it back son
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Old 09-15-03, 12:18 AM   #7
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ill shit,nice word play,nice structure,nice drop all-in-all.keep spittin.~1~
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