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Chronicles 1 - Recruitment
IP: C4EA A331
[Talking]
3 Friends, 3 similiar lives, but now there about to wonder into a place of death, destruction and evil. But at least for now, they don't know, what lies ahead. The Recruitment Office, Sunny, Dirty & Dusty… War Veteran Taking Names, Life’s Rusty… Thirstily Grasping The Pen, Water & Coolness… 500 Eagar Men, Their Feelin’s Trying To Express… Only Seeking Success, But Failure Is Needed To Progress… They Have No Idea Of The Distress, Regress n’ Stress… That Lays Ahead, They Could’ve Had A Good Life - They Choose War Instead, However Most Will End Up Dead… They’ve Made Their Bed, Forwards To Gore, Horror n’ Dread… Most Recruits Respectable, Not A Guilt Hair On Their Head… They Were Influentially Led, Now They’ve Made Their Bed… Not Ready To Die, But Then Again They’ve Said Their Last Goodbye… Denying That Their Brain Will Lose It’s Oxygen Supply… [Sung]x2 500 Young Men, Never To be Seen Again… Before Sleep, They Pray A Amen… Asking God To keep Them Safe… Keep Them Emotionally Sane… 500 Young Men, Never To be Seen Again… Their Name, False Age, And Address… Told With A Tired And Weary Request… Innocence, Virtue And Life’s Purity… But Ready To Advance Into Maturity… Over Their, They Got No Mother’s Security… But They be Calling Their Name…. Then They Sigh, And There Outta The ‘Game’… One Split Second, One Misinterpreted Aim… But To Them At The Minute, There Expecting Military Fame… But Now, There Only Expecting The Best… Still Thriving From The Recruitment Zest… No Idea, What’s Gonna Happen To Their Chest… [bang] There Goin' Into This War, Expecting Nothin' Less... Than Victory, But There Gonna Come Out - Wondering-How-They-Got-Into-This-Mess!!...[aaahhh] [Sung]x4 500 Young Men, Never To be Seen Again… Before Sleep, They Pray A Amen… Asking God To keep Them Safe… Keep Them Emotionally Sane… 500 Young Men, Never To be Seen Again… (P.S this is gonna be around 6 parts, revealing 3 mens lives before, during & after war.) |
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IP: C4EA A331
uppin'
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IP: 0E86 D85E
you need to stop rapping with ed in the end. increase you verbal apptitude or else i'll slap you with a wet fish. Why don't you eat some matza balls and think up a new thing to rap about?
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IP: 5C42 F161
yo yo yo, stop all the hating, this was aight yo, like a dried apricot with powdered sugar on it, but like that it's tastes kinda weird, but it got fiber, so you're good, just you will duke a lot. PEACE IM OUTIE like a disgusting belly button
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IP: 9B33 081B
^wtf.........this wasn't bad seemed like you watered down your vocab a bit but everything was pretty good.............decent topic.......nice intro if you will into the more gritty part of a larger story.......i liked the way it flowed sounds to me like you wrote this for audio the way it read made me want to sing along......lol......what beat did you write this to if any?......might make a difference when you read it...........overalll this was pretty dope.......1
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Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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IP: 4F77 A701
i agree with you ^^ prophit
this looks good and the idea is original in its own way i dont know how you normally are so i dont know if you waterd down or whatever the vocab was rather simple, but the flow was easy to find, i just hope i remember to see the other 162361282 parts when your done with them.. should overall be good, just fix the vocab up for part 2 |
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IP: 270F 55D5
aight, pretty weird fisrt few replies, i do normally have use a pretty extensive vocab, but i sometimes just say fuck it and use simplified rhymes, i'll certainly work on pt.2 with the help of your comments.
Check some of my older stuff out, and you should se better vocab in there...thanz for the replies though ![]() |
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