-Verse 1-
I gotta get back on track, cause im too doped up offa crack/
I just got done talking smack, now no ones got my back/
And the fact, is ill leave you knocked out so all you seeing is “black”/
So how the fuck am I gonna listen to you when your layed-out?/
Shits being “re-maked”, cause im not getting played-now/
All people see me as a shy-guy, I dare you to try-my, temper/
Cause ill pull the blade out faster than a second so your head gets severed/
And leave your body laying there in the rainy weather/
Im so sick and tired of all these fake-asses, that take-chances, and end up losing/
Cause all they do is throw their hands up and shout out words, that’s why the crowds booing/
And I got a short temper, with all this madness rendered, into hatred/
Im constantly stripped of my pride left me feeling naked, Things once were sacred/
Now they just have no meaning, they are just nothing, just a little memory/
People once close friends, are now my worst enemy/
I don’t think I can deal with this shit that’s a head-of-me/

-Chorus-
Cause Times Like These, Bring you to your knees/
Got you begging please, as you pick yourself up piece by piece/
And Times like these, its just hard to see/
What everything means, and what you mean to me/
Cause times like these, just bring you to your knees/
Got you begging please, as you pick yourself up piece by piece/

-Verse 2-
I cant listen to what anyone says-anymore/
Cause my ex girl, just went lez,-that-whore/
Trust is easily broken, while false shit is spoken, but you believe-in-it/
But you got the gun to point and let yourself relieve-in-it/
And it just keeps getting harder, to live with yourself/
Going day by day, knowing you need more-help/
But fuck it, im getting tired of all the shit being said/
About time I start to cock it, pull the trigger, and send some lead/
I don’t give a fuck who you are, you gonna fuck with me, ill leave ya dead/
So take this as a fair-warning, cause you’ll wake one rare-morning, and find me standing-there/
Now you know I don’t joke around, when Im through, you’ll be demanding-care/
And im tired of these fake bitches, that just rant shit and cant back-it/
They just scream and shout, like there getting fucked by a faggot/
All I can do is just sit and wait, and take notes, I gotta plan-fast/
Now with so many challenges ahead of me, I don’t know how long I can-last/

-Chorus-
Cause Times Like These, Bring you to your knees/
Got you begging please, as you pick yourself up piece by piece/
And Times like these, its just hard to see/
What everything means, and what you mean to me/
Cause times like these, just bring you to your knees/
Got you begging please, as you pick yourself up piece by piece/

-Verse 3-
I just drift in my sarrows, until I feel like im drowned/
Feeling like im left alone, like 6 feet under ground/
But fuck this life, cause you can only try so much until you fail/
Just one more thing, left unchecked, cause I had to bail/
Sometimes theres just no point to things, so why even try/
When all you get in the end is to find out everything was a lie/
So you sit at home staring at the gun, thinking is it worth to die?/
Then you get this hope of inspiration, that everything will be fine/
When all the time, you got those things on your mind/
But you can only be fucked with so much, before you burst/
Cause every damn time you’re the one left feeling hurt/
But fuck it, cause I had enough and im not taking-shit/
And you all can go fuck yourselves, cause im not faking-it/

that was pretty hot good drop like the flow

yo man good drop good drop, chorus flows nice and so does most of the song, maybe a few places where it could be touched up a bit but that can proply vary with the reader but overall man it was a good drop.

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Hey guys thanks for the feedback, Keep it coming, Thanks.

Nice drop dawg.......U're getting better....I like your style , your rhyme scheme was blazing in this piece.............Your chorus was iLL.....Nice shit dawg..........The first verse was tight......Your structure was Nice......The second verse was again tight.....U never fell off , you kept the paste going.......U kinda lacked vocabulary in this piece...But the way u played wit your words made up for it......So overall: 7.9/10......You lost the 3 points because u lacked vocabulary.............Return the favour http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80376

i didnt think the rhyme scheme was blazing but it was a coo' drop man

keep spitting

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that shit was phat dude, the flow was good, the wordplay was aight, and i was definetly feelin the chorus and content. good shit, keep postin and elevatin dude i enjoyed readin that.

yo please return the favor, check out "changes" if u could, thanx

Nice flow yo that was some good shit so return da favour and check out Lif or shit

Nice flow yo that was some good shit so return da favour and check out Life or shit

good shit dawg..........................

"I cant listen to what anyone says-anymore/
Cause my ex girl, just went lez,-that-whore/"

thought it was all strong, i specially liked these two, good flo
i would change "that-whore" to 'the-whore., better flo

PEACE....................jus returning da feedback

Hey thanks man, yeah the-whore would flow better, thanks for the feedback though, much appreciated, thanks.

Im upppping this for some more feedback, if you leave some its much appreciated, thanks.

The hook was some dope shit, with in the versus the flow was good, vocab was good but could be upped, nice rhyme scheme stay up dunnie...

DAMN!!! i was mos def fealin this drop.....it flowed nice, chorus was hot too! i was really feelin verses 2 and 3.....keep it up, 1

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" So for the 2nd time [The Pharisses] summoned the man who had been blind and said
"Speak the truth before God. We know this man is a sinner."
"Wether he is a sinner I do not know."
:The man replied:
"All I know is this...Once I was blind and now I can see"
John 1x 24-26