Aiyo sometimes I rhyme right/
and sometimes I rhyme tight/
but sometimes I feel that my rhymes won't put up a fight/
in the lime light/
star light star bright/
grant me the wish that I wish tonight/
and I want you to know/
don't be hatin' my flow/
and a vodo doll is what you're gonna sew/
but I reap what I soe/
and your body won't grow/
so I'm permantly stuck in battlin mode/
love was the code/
but now it's invalid/
and you ain't gonna hear me singin' me a ballad/
you dropped me like a bad habit/
dang nabbit/
but now I bounce back and that's why I'm Rabbit/
and oh you all alone/
without my flow/
and all you know/
is you a hoe/
and you hatin'/
and debatin/
your rhymes are whack and your flow is breakin/
but it's all right/
hey and it's okay/ im new to this game so get out of my way/
G Rabbit's here and he's gonna stay/
freestylin and flyin like he's got no today/
I heard he's a psycho/
not likin' in the light yo/
he's tryin' to make a name for himself in the hype though/
he got no crew and got no respect so/
he's gonna try and start shit with a fight yo/
someone please stop him from unleashing his might... NO!
he's here and here we go/
open mic post here trying to be free/
rappin it up like a maniac see/
Rap Battles this who I be/
G Rabbit's my name what you think of me?/
am I aight and pretty good for a honkey/
or am I a whack ass no skilled monkey?/
you tell me and let me know/
cuz I wanna be great but I gotta grow/
Aiyo one...

What you think?

aight....................thought it was kinda basic an you aint writin in full lines,

keep practicing and "IT SHALL COME"

see ya dawg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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