immature and curled attached to an inner world
a glinting pearl clammed shut untill i unfurled
darkness continued as i developed within sinews
innocent prelude to when i laboured sins dues
enveloped in a body bag the blueprint evolved
sprouting new folds of skin in natures mold
eyes widened daily prepared for horizons
eager to be enlightened i patiently fed from bloods syphon...

then;

my host for the duration musta eaten comedy medication
my mind started racing and i erupted from slumbers cavement..

mid section attached i bunjeed on the chord
no danger from falls i was only inches off the 'floor'
fuck that!..i grabbed my rope and freed my mid rift
i stood up shakily...looked down...and saw two dicks!
what is this? i wanted to attach myself back
but curiosity nearly killed me...and the cat!
i slithered into the slimy fallopian tube and spied light
entrance prevented me from going further...but i also saw lice!
blood trickled past me this seemed to happen in periods
then a white missile cut off rays...u cant be serious
groping my way back up energy refused to abate
'It's like that' echoed thru skins face & i broke danced in space
enough...i trampolined on soft tissues membrane
i was in sane?and landed pretending to be an airplane
muffled screams of hurt sounded i stood in silence
then some bitch stuck a needle thru my chamber in violence
like an assistant at rogue magicians magic boxes
i dodged and swerved to avoid takin knocks..why cudnt u have adopted?
she eventually stopped..so knotted a noose in the chord
suicide dawned but fuk it..i wanted to live for this whore
instead i looped myself back and attached to blood
the alcoholic content was high and i was feeling....drunk!
passed out woke months later and found my host in labour
the walls of my world contracted to free my navel
feet first i scrabbled to stay inside this red house
but cold metal objects clasped around and forced me out..

the hairy lips issued a kiss when i passed their clit
hips emitted me covered in vagina spit i was lifted and the bunjee rifted
but i was premature!..i jumped down and grabbed both lips
but they cudnt be shifted..similar to a virgins rejecting this remit

damn you rocked proper on this twin i say mass skill and delivery wordplay and stll emotion though it seamed more agressive i also see a lil hint of calm patten. peep my new joint "DEDICTED TO YOU!!!!!!!"

Not a bad piece... had a lot of good points... but in some spots the flow was off a little... & i didnt understand the lice part

but other than that it wasnt that bad... peace

Let me just say 2 things, 1. you have a sick mind, 2. This seemed to go very well with the beat to "Can't Hold Us Down", i was listening to it when rating this..nice.

anway, your flow here was killa, nice internals, and you used a sorta "bar" rhyming scheme here which was nice, see it more in battles, dope.
Your vocab really helped to describe the 'actions' (lol) etc..which your fortuantly (he..he) went into great detail, showed your talent here.

Overall, this was a good piece, it was well structed, with nice bar length, defiently a ncie topic 8/10

Glad to see you back on Rb, we missed you dawg!

thanks^

uppin
read something decent....

fuck you

and you

hell0

thanks for reading

i liked that shit..it was hot i thought...good wordplay..an flow i thought was good, internals were dope as well...good piece

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