CarsonJet......-2k4 that is....

here u are....

Im a What?.....

Well....

Lets start it off about dis story bout CJ-

One morning upon wakening up I noticed I was sportin new parts-
works of art,I felt a lil extra tissue bustin up from da heart-
I felt the need ta grab.....'holy shit 36'c's...what up wit these?-
An look my knees!...burnt up like dey been branded wit 100 degrees-
Damn...Look at me...how did this happen? Im a college caucasian tease!-
please....If im here now....I might as well enjoy da' festivities-

so......
Carson straps'on da Bra-an what da fuk?o hell naw-
Carson aint slippin in that...it'll floss his ass raw!-
How dese bitches'fit in dese heels my feet aint shaped like that?-
spaghetti straps!?..fuk that-them shoe'laces aint gon hold my rack-

So i throw en ensamble an hit the streets'in searcha lesbo love-
News flash'I check my snatch an would u bet?...a bloody dove-

fuk this stuff-......
What did i do to reincarnate a bitch on the rag-
I feel like a C in drag-
embarrased'.....now look my tities sagg'd-

lol...I don't think I ever heard of nobody rhymin' about bein' reincarnated as a bitch...this shit was madd creative son...and a coupla parts had me laughin' too...keep reppin' the fam to the fullest CJ...

Yeah this was a pretty good peice i thought, it was a good read as well, you had good flow, the concept was good, and your content was good also, Overall id say it was a pretty good peice, keep dropping.

I KNEW YOU WERE THE PERFECT PERSON FOR HIS TOPIC TWIN I KNEW IT AND IM HARDLY EVER WRONG HIT ME IF YOU WANT MORE LIKE THIS......

YOU DID ABOVE WHAT I EXPECTED.

This was decent drop,flow was there.You stayed on topic,try some multis,metties,vocab and bar structure and you'll be okay.Keep dropping kid,1
If you'd be so kind,drop a vote:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...?threadid=81757

str8....i say i did mediocre on dis....i coulda done betta'.....
thanks fer feedbak...pc*1*

good piece...very weird topic..well not weird just unespected..but great to read..for summin like this i give you 9/10..keep it up

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