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09-29-03, 02:45 AM
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Just had a bad day
IP: 29E3 BDD7
I spit my rhymes to get off of some of my frustraition,
Its like these babies waitin for moms their to start lactatin, They the first to run their mouth but the last to back it up, Tell me to fight their battles but now enough is enough, You need to let up, cause i wont be their every time, If you get fucked up, the guilty conscience wont be mine, Cause you deserve what you get, what goes around comes back, You try to play hard, but all it proves is that you know how to act. I just want a little feed back, i had kind of a bad day |
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09-29-03, 06:03 AM
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IP: 29E3 BDD7
i know its short but can i plz get some feed back...........................
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10-05-03, 04:35 AM
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IP: 29E3 BDD7
uppin fo feed back.............................................. ..................
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10-05-03, 05:14 PM
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Banned for being stupid
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IP: B9FD 0FD6
aight holmes for a newb that wasnt that bad, short and to the point, but ima say try and elevate more on ur vocab, wordplay, and try and fit in more internal rhymes, but other than that it was pretty good, keep at it kid.
peace..... |
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10-05-03, 08:43 PM
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IP: 340D 8B8F
Yeah i agree...it wasnt too bad...it flowed pretty decent through out the piece...your structure was pretty good overall...add more internals to support the flow though...your vocab was alright could be up'd a little bit...your content was good too i thought..but overall it was a pretty good drop for a newer member..keep dropping.
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