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These Tears I cry

The first form to develop in my vision is a tear so small in form yet so powerful in depth....slicing its way down my neck it’s the pains first incision ~Everything i can remember as fukked up and disillusioned as it all may seem ..never hurt as much as hearing you with anger speak my name.....these tears I cry turn to ice and flood my veins...they run cold....chill every life they touch...they freeze n come to a steady....look deep into this tear gripping to my cheek....when you see your reflection in it can you speak?

....This one tear starts the puddle of sorrow....the stream of pity....how can I bleed so much water when my well of emotions is so empty?

Take a deeper look into this tear ....reach for the color of deep blue...touch it and into blood it shall change....you see clear?...with that tear I feel hurt I feel anger I feel fear...I see its other relatives that have been shed over this tragic filled year~

I see ugly I see pain I see that once this tear is shed things will never be the same. These tears I cry I cry for me....not just so you can tell I have emotion...because to pain I am owed for undeniable devotion~

In my eyes there lies several colors...blue for sorrow....green...for demise.. I color them with happiness but these tears tare away my thin disguise~

take one last look into that tear that has stained my face with hatred.....can you see the mirror image of sin?...do you see the small bodies of four year olds that have been raped over n over again?,...do you see the beaten wife's with black eyes n split lips?.....do you see the faithful prostitutes that sell there self's...n hopes of a $5 dollar tip?...can you see the bleeding the poor? the 15 year old gurl carrying a fetus that hasn't had the chance to explore?

the young thug that's sellin substances to help his momma through the unemployment line?...the baby gurl who just opened the safety lock on her mommas sleeping pills?....the lil gurls that are being kidnapped around the world by men looking for 30 seconds of pleasure....?.....the homeless man on the street that found a leftover half eaten sandwich his newly found treasure.....?

.in that tear do you see the motherless babies?......the animals dying tied to a fence from starvation?...the cutters n self mutilators?..

.the gurl in black with eyes darkened to a depth no lighter than night.....? the brothers leavening baby brothers to learn from their mistakes......the men dying in wars that leave there wife's with nothing more than a security check....the serial killers that breath your blood n drink your fear?.....in that tear......do you think that you see safety or comfort?....in my tear that's drying to my face.....do you think this anguish is a sanctuary type place?.

....can you see the worlds fear.... can you see they have all combined into one tear...for the flow to continue no it hasn't died......for it all starts with this tear i cried.....look deep into this tear gripping to my cheek....when you see your reflection in it can you speak?....

uppin for sum replies

ok one more time...everybody's feeling fine...here we go now yes yes here we go N*synce is feelin fine

what a horrible way to reply to someone who
deserves more than a damn sentence....

OMG tight vocab is a freepost...you wouldnt appreciate it...

go to open mic with that bullshit

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amazing drop, creativity was mad dope, your vocab was off the hook. your imagination an wordplay was really creative..you wrote great...wudnt critique anything..good drop peace

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Amazing piece, i would love to disect it but i feel i would cause sensory overload lol, a few of those misspelings bertray your intelligence but the depth of this piece shallows the ocean. It was felt with an overall positive feel throughout the bad times and the struggles of life which was soothing, u could have gone off about the problems in depth but u kept it all relevant and pulled the reader in with its simplexity (complexity/simplicity) I really felt it, sickening drop, twas quite loose (get up on that new term) 1luv.