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Old 10-01-03, 12:33 PM   #1
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You’re sitting in a 2 ton explosive machine,

Looking straight out looking dead at the x mass tree

All your mind is concentrated on is that yellow glow,

Waiting for the green to emit a bright glow,

Feet positioned so perfect, left foot on clutch,

Right gently on the gas ready to jump to the gas,

All about reaction time, the hardest thing to get right,

So precious to the second as it may be the difference,

Between a upset lose or a magnificent win,

As I roll to the tree and the pre stage lights come on,

I look at the second from bottom light concentrating,

As it flashes I plan it right so I’ll get off just as the light turns green,

Brake off and gas to the floor as the rail car shoots me down the track,

Passing the check point and poppin the shoots,

I roll and pull off coming to a stop and I look back at the board,

Reaction Tim: .510 God damn, almost perfect… Speed: 225

Not bad for a quarter mile and 1500 horsepower sittin 2 feet from you……
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Old 10-01-03, 01:06 PM   #2
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HOLY CRAP

out of teh 3 years ove been reading net poetry i neva seen a poem written like this lmao

the christmas tree thing drug me in and i had to continure reading cuz i wanted to kno what the hell you were writing about lmao

holy jeesus this was weird


Brake off and gas to the floor as the rail car shoots me down the track,
^ prolly my fave line cuz it gives us a sense of teh building adrenilane

wow this was a very intresting peice ...honestly i never read anything along this line before im kinda impressed with your creativity


please peep myne if you have time

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Old 10-01-03, 03:11 PM   #3
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Smooth your poem was a little hard to understand for me...but very well written none the less, keep up this good shit. Some of the lines had me thinking, LOL. Hazy where you get those cool pictures with 'glitter' and 'punk'?

also pleez check my battle in front lines

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Old 10-01-03, 04:34 PM   #4
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iight

i agree with Hazy, never have i ever seen something written like that, its really different, and unique, but the biggest part i like about it is, there isnt someone dying, no one greiving, just a happy go piece about everyday life ( well for some ppl ) not saying that the sad pieces are bad just its nice to read a piece every now and then that doesnt grab a hold of your heart and twist it. i did find that some times the rhymes and lines were a bit shaking, but the over all uniqueness of it covered it up.

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Old 10-01-03, 11:44 PM   #5
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I'm unique because with my feelings, i'm everything a girl wants. Then you go to my hobbies, my life, It's circled around cars street racing and the killer rush there is. Because I think the world might end doesn't mean i'm gonna go cut myself up. I jump in my car and go race around till i feel better. This one above, a railcar for those who may not know is a top feul dragster. The x mas tree, is the set of lights where you line up. Study a giant book and member all the rules is hard but hey thats what you gotta do to drive one of these beasts. well i'm out and for anyone else wants to read enjoy and give me your comments. Much appreciated
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Old 10-07-03, 10:39 AM   #6
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Your poem was one that I like because its what I do. I do it everyday. This is my passion and my natural high. It makes the adrenaline rush. You know what im talking about.

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Old 10-11-03, 03:04 PM   #7
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Awesome post JT. This is what drives me as well as you. Speed. Just sitting on the line watching the tree as it goes from red to green. Waiting to punch it. This shows what you're feelin inside as well as what your thinkin. Great job.
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Old 11-24-03, 06:54 PM   #8
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uppen this for feed till i get something new in my head.
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Old 11-24-03, 07:33 PM   #9
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great post i like it b/c it is different. and it stand out. and you writting styal is orginal great job
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Old 11-26-03, 11:48 AM   #10
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uppen, anymore takers??
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Old 11-26-03, 12:19 PM   #11
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yo, i liked the structure, and the poem was pretty funny,

You’re sitting in a 2 ton explosive machine,

Looking straight out looking dead at the x mass tree

i couldnt criticize this even if i wanted to, it was a very nice drop.


aiight

plz check my poem out, it called 'thoughts'

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