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vvurd-pley
IP: 2004 681B
Ayo' aheada my time so I'm changin the clocks//
I'm aimin to drop, so I stay flamin da spot// my kraniums hot, my tape just shoved in ya box// like 10,000 dagreez when I'm offa da top// you luv how I rock, put da smackdown on nighaz testin my glock// on stage holdin my kroch, pissin on you like R. Kelly just lettin you watch// and you still luvin me, dont say nuthin different// just listen, as da word play transitions// somebody hotta gimme his name he's missin// same ole mission, da same lames I'm dissin// sit back and peep da perscise perscision// spit wurds dat-u'll trap you in like life in prison// I'm nise wit written, but you can only imagine since dis a keystyle I'm spittin// sLiCaD3n'u is da name, sika den you is da description// my wurd-play is so hot even deaf people listen// |
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IP: 2004 681B
uppin for some feed back dayum somebody say sumpthin!!!!!!!!!!!
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IP: 2004 681B
>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>uppin<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<
C'mon I need sum kinda feed back. Critique me!!!!!!!!! |
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IP: 690B 80D9
yo i thought that your flow was pretty dope....
u ryhmed pretty well... keep droppin... return the favour.... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82929 |
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IP: 2004 681B
Good lookin out!!!!!!!!
critique me more yah!!!!! |
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IP: 7AA4 D75E
the flow was good and the clock line was nice i also thought you had great structure and wordplay as well (hence the title)
I'm nise wit written, but you can only imagine since dis a keystyle I'm spittin// ^ that was my fave line had a nice vibe to it pay back teh favor with teh *STALKER* link in my signature hazy |
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IP: 2004 681B
Das crazy how I already did and asked you to critique my shyt at da same time youposted this^.
das crazy. UPPIN FOR cratiques!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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IP: 2004 681B
>>>>>>>~still want sum more peeps to critique me~<<<<<<<
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Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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IP: 3921 0878
this was really good
the wordplay shined the most...duh! flow was good but not always on point structure was a little off as well good drop kid |
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