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Old 10-04-03, 07:18 PM   #1
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Garbage

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Been spitten since i could hold the mic/
dirtiest player like Flair on monday night/
the game like Triple H ya'll catch the pedigree/
definitly deadly on instrumental melodies/
ryming since adolocence now in my twenties/
before a cypherin legend now no one can touch me/
wisest and flyest emcee you've ever seen/
keepin stomachs turning givin exploding spleens/
bad genes and Jim Beam kept me determind/
like setting up OJ by that faggot Mark Furman/
Blurring in and out of conscienceness/
poppin shit bring a wrath to your metropolis/
droppin this to keep you shakin like addicts/
this static is past sick stretch the game like elastic/
flows plastic your verses are recycled/
your garbage like the WIZ with or without Micheal/
dismantling cats till i burn down the cypher/
heineken pheen that prolly stole your lighter/
spitten disses at everyone in my optical/
philisophical sending women to the hospital/
for damage to vaginas and to the uterus/
engaging in papsmers cuz pussy keeps me studious/
bustin the ovaries has them open like fallopian/
cancerous cat with the use of petroleum/

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Old 10-04-03, 10:14 PM   #2
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you had some nice ideas in some lines, like the wiz/michael line

got a few fillers but it was a good drop

keep spitting and keep getting better
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Old 10-04-03, 10:26 PM   #3
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Yeah this was good piece i thought, it made a good read, it flowed pretty well through out the piece fell off a little at some spots, you had good content as well, overall it was a good piece, keep dropping.
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Old 10-04-03, 10:33 PM   #4
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Fuck Masta C if you don't give a real response soon i think a mod will have to ban your ass... ya feel cam?

anyways this was truly ill Co my fav was:
"droppin this to keep you shakin like addicts/
this static is past sick stretch the game like elastic/
flows plastic your verses are recycled/
your garbage like the WIZ with or without Micheal/"

Ha! that shit was tight...

Altogether i give it 8.5/10 man i only hope this is your peak...um... nah... i doubt it...

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Old 10-05-03, 01:57 AM   #5
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uppin this shit so reply mutha fuckers i got 70 posts and 4 of them are threads the rest are replies
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Old 10-05-03, 02:01 AM   #6
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yo it was a nice spit i felt you slacked off a lil at times but it was a hot piece my nigga. big ups and keep elevatin
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Old 10-06-03, 05:39 PM   #7
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uppin this shit so reply mutha fuckers i got 77 posts and 4 of them are threads the rest are replies
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Old 10-19-03, 01:51 AM   #8
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Nice rap. Good flow. Nice mult/medda combo. Still need to elevate a tincy wincy bit. Good luck..

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Old 10-19-03, 11:24 AM   #9
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quite a simple structure, but i liked it, thought you made good us of vocab, and the flow seemed to come nicely....all in all not bad......the only thing i would say is i think open mics are better with a couple of verses and a hook..but....peace
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